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Many young people today choose or are forced to go and work abroad. What are the advantages & disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country compared with living and working in your own country? Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Many young people today choose or are forced to go and work abroad. What are the advantages & disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country compared with living and working in your own country? v. 2
In today’s era, writing in hand is considered by some people to be increasingly less significant to be taught with the popularity of typing. Disagreeing to it, I claim that handwriting should be well educated in children but other types are supposed to be rationally used as well. handwriting contributes to children especially in developing their study skills. In the process of children studying handwriting, they also improve their literal skills. while using traditional handwriting, they will strengthen their skills in memorizing educational materials. that is because when taking notes in hand, they will easily remember the content with writing again and again. Additionally, it promotes a better skill in writing with lots of practice. Another benefit is that students studying handwriting which represents the unique culture of its country, will strengthen their sense of belonging to their motherland and it will be protected and inherited better in return. Language generally plays a vital role in a country’s culture, in other words, shoulders the mission of preserving ethical memorial and handwriting is one of the most primary methods to conserve and inherit it. when children are taught with this method, they will understand the words’ meaning, its origin and the development process better. Thus, by grasping these, they will find they belong to their country and understand their great culture. it will bring about better preservation and inheritance and even enrich the culture by putting into new blood. but some rising means of recording information like typing, show their strong vigor for their tremendous convenience in education. The biggest advantage is that they lead to a rapid speed in recording information like class or lecture notes compared to traditional handwriting while it is in an urgency that words or sentences must be fast recorded or something crucial would be missed. Meanwhile, information typed is also convenient to conserve or upload to the Internet compared to paper which is easy to lose. In conclusion, though handwriting as a traditional recording information means, undergoes a strong hit by modern methods like typing using keyboards, it still has an irreplaceable role for children’s study and cultural protection.
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today
’s era, writing in hand
is considered
by
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some
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people
to be
increasingly
less significant to
be taught
with the popularity of typing. Disagreeing to it, I claim that
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handwriting
should be
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well educated
in
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children
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but
other types
are supposed
to be
rationally
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used
as well
.

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handwriting
contributes to
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children
especially
in developing their study
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skills
. In the process of
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children
studying
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handwriting
, they
also
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improve
their literal
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skills
.
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while
using traditional
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handwriting
, they will strengthen their
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skills
in memorizing educational materials.
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that
is
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because
when taking notes in hand, they will
easily
remember the content with writing again and again.
Additionally
, it promotes a
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better
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skill
in writing with lots of practice.

Another benefit is that students studying
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handwriting
which represents the unique
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culture
of its country, will strengthen their sense of belonging to their motherland and it will
be protected
and inherited
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better
in return. Language
generally
plays a vital role in a country’s
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culture
,
in other words
, shoulders the mission of preserving ethical memorial and
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handwriting
is one of the most primary methods to conserve and inherit it. when
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children
are taught
with this method, they will understand the words’ meaning, its origin and the development process
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better
.
Thus
, by grasping these, they will find they belong to their country and understand their great
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culture
.
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it
will bring about
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better
preservation and inheritance and even enrich the
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culture
by putting into new blood.

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but
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some
rising means of recording
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information
like typing,
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show
their strong vigor for their tremendous convenience in education. The biggest advantage is that they lead to a rapid speed in recording
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information
like
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class
or lecture notes compared to traditional
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handwriting
while it is in an urgency that words or sentences
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must
be
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fast
recorded or something crucial would
be missed
. Meanwhile,
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information
typed is
also
convenient to conserve or upload to the Internet compared to paper which is easy to lose.

In conclusion
, though
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handwriting
as a traditional recording
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information
means, undergoes a strong hit by modern methods like typing using keyboards, it
still
has an irreplaceable role for
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children’s
study and cultural protection.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Many young people today choose or are forced to go and work abroad. What are the advantages & disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country compared with living and working in your own country? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
354 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Check your writing for errors
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