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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? v.30

Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? v. 30
Working professionals do a little task during the working day or on weekends whenever they are free and suffer with health issues. Yes, it is true. In my opinion, doing lesson for a lot of points helps you free from problems which are affecting your soul. Firstly, employers will be having their offices at irregular intervals makes them free from test. They will not concentrate on physical fitness and healthy growth style. They will eat a lot of junk food in the evening and for lunch, they will go to restaurants and not eating healthy food makes them disorders in their heart. This leads to obesity and it is common among all the people which makes them feel uncomfortable with others. For example, some companies will be having morning variation at 6am and some others will have 2: 30pm and others having night shifts. This makes them to wake up late and early basing on the retention policies from companies and also their work pressure makes them to involve habit of drinking and smoking which causes diseases. Secondly, for solving this problem they should be adjusting their era to act. For example, if we consider the morning move people have a drill at evening at around 4pm and afternoon conversion people has hour to do an action in the morning at around 8am because they will be late and sleeps and eats late so at around 11pm-12am which makes them to sleep for 8hrs makes possible to do the operation. Similarly, general and night change guys have a day to do in their own space like 7am for general shifts and four night shifts people have to do act at around 4pm in evening like that of the morning transfer. In this way term will be adjusted to make the problem. In this way problem will be solved. Finally, to conclude it is a good habit to have acted for a long point or in their free turn to adjust to healthy lifestyle.
Working professionals do a
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little
task during the working day or on weekends whenever they are
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free
and suffer with health issues. Yes, it is true. In my opinion, doing lesson for
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a lot of
points
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helps
you
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free
from
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problems
which are affecting your soul.

Firstly
, employers will be having their offices at irregular intervals
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makes
them
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free
from
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test
. They will not concentrate on physical fitness and healthy growth style. They will eat
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a lot of
junk food in the evening and for lunch, they will go to restaurants and not eating healthy food
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makes
them disorders in their heart. This leads to obesity and it is common among all the
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people
which
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makes
them feel uncomfortable with others.
For example
,
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some
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companies
will be having
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morning
variation at 6am and
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some
others will have 2: 30pm
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and others
having night shifts. This
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makes
them to wake up late and early basing on the retention policies from
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companies
and
also
their work pressure
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makes
them to involve habit of drinking and smoking which causes diseases.

Secondly
, for solving this
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problem
they should be adjusting their era to act.
For example
, if we consider the
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morning
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move
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people
have a drill at evening at
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around
4pm and afternoon conversion
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people
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has
hour to do an action in the
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morning
at
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around
8am
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because
they will be late and sleeps and eats late
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so
at
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around
11pm-12am which
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makes
them to sleep for 8hrs
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makes
possible to do the operation.
Similarly
, general and night
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change
guys have a day to do in their
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own
space like 7am for general shifts and four night shifts
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people
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have to
do act at
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around
4pm in evening like that of the
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morning
transfer. In this way term will
be adjusted
to
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make
the
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problem
. In this way
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problem
will
be solved
.

Finally
,
to conclude
it is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
habit to have acted for a long point or in their
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free
turn to adjust to healthy lifestyle.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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