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Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. v. 3
Many are of the view that control is innate, rather than cultivated through time and experience. In my opinion, leadership is largely more developed rather than gifted. On one hand, those who presume that there are naturally born leaders whose traits are fixed size. There are certain individuals who exhibit a natural personality and unique character of expertise. To be a leader, it demands certain natural skills, full of energy and strong personality to take the lead. All these traits help the ruler to manage, to gather people together and, also, to inspire and motivate them. For instance, Balaji Singh, Canada’s president natural born political leader who inspires many people with his boundless professional abilities, charisma and display astounding skills. Therefore, being sociable, charisma and having strong traits are important natural skills for being a chief. On the other hand, great direction is more thoughtful than impulsive. There are many individuals possessing all physical characteristics of a leader who are successful and inspire people. An instructive example of this is Balaji Singh. Early in his career, he inspired people with this exceptional talent, but, that had its limits as he pushed and degraded his political members ultimately leading to his removal from his own party. This mortifying experience led to softening the sharp edges of his character in the subsequent years by considering the others perspective and giving opportunity to other competent associates. These learned traits served him well when he was re-elected as president of Canada and reached what many believe as the apex of administration. In conclusion, some people are born as leaders while others become rulers by their choice through cultivating it. Natural skills can be achieved by practice to a certain point, when the physical characteristics take the lead.
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are of the view that control is innate,
rather
than cultivated through time and experience. In my opinion, leadership is
largely
more developed
rather
than gifted.

On one hand, those
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presume that there are
naturally
born
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leaders
whose
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traits
are
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fixed
size. There are certain individuals
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who
exhibit a
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natural
personality and unique character of expertise. To be a
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leader
, it demands certain
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natural
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skills
, full of energy and strong personality to take the lead. All these
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traits
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help
the ruler to manage, to gather
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people
together and,
also
, to inspire and motivate them.
For instance
, Balaji Singh, Canada’s president
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natural born
political
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leader
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who
inspires
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many
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people
with his boundless professional abilities, charisma and display astounding
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skills
.
Therefore
, being sociable, charisma and having strong
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traits
are
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important
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natural
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skills
for being a chief.

On the
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other
hand, great direction is more thoughtful than impulsive. There are
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many
individuals possessing all physical characteristics of a
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leader
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who
are successful and inspire
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people
. An instructive example of this is Balaji Singh. Early in his career, he inspired
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people
with this exceptional talent,
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but
, that had its limits as he pushed and degraded his political members
ultimately
leading to his removal from his
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own
party. This mortifying experience led to softening the sharp edges of his character in the subsequent years by considering the others perspective and giving opportunity to
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other
competent associates. These learned
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traits
served him well when he was re-elected as president of Canada and reached what
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many
believe as the apex of administration.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
are born
as
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leaders
while others become rulers by their choice through cultivating it.
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Natural
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skills
can
be achieved
by practice to a certain point, when the physical characteristics take the lead.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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