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Nowadays many people eat very badly in spite of the information, which is available about ways to have a health, balanced diet. What could be the possible causes of this? Suggest some solutions which may improve the eating habits of the young. v.1

Nowadays many people eat very badly in spite of the information, which is available about ways to have a health, balanced diet. What could be the possible causes of this? Suggest some solutions which may improve the eating habits of the young. v. 1
Eating habits are changing at an alarming rate and unfortunately those ways are being adopted which are not good. There is not a single cause that is responsible for all this, because there are numerous factors responsible for this. The Government is trying to curb this issue. In my opinion, there is need of collaborative efforts. First and foremost, the cause of eating badly is the hectic schedule of life. In running time everybody is running to make the both ends meet and there is no time to cook healthy food, more significantly no time to eat calmly. All this affecting the eating habits negatively. Moving further, easy availability of fast foods has impacted eating habits badly. For instance, there is accessibility to eat from outside at a door step and in this type of situation who will bother to cook at home, even though outside food is unhealthy. However, every obstacle has a solution and this issue can also be sorted. The best solution is the self-motivation. There is a need that people should realize the value of healthy eating, if they do so then the trouble will be resolved. But for this, the government should run more campaigns, not only with the benefits of healthy eating but also with effects of unhealthy eating. To conclude, in my viewpoint, this problem is a matter of concern, as it is seen with more craze in new generation which will affect society more negatively. But, if individual and the government both takes action to curb this affair, it can be eliminated before it gets deep rooted
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Eating
habits are changing at an alarming rate and unfortunately those ways are
being adopted
which are not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. There is not a single cause
that is
responsible for all this,
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because
there are numerous factors responsible for this. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
is trying to curb this issue. In my opinion, there
is need
of collaborative efforts.

First
and foremost, the cause of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
badly
is the hectic schedule of life. In running time everybody is running to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the both ends
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
and there is no time to cook healthy food, more
significantly
no time to eat
calmly
. All this affecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
habits
negatively
. Moving
further
, easy availability of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
foods has impacted
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
habits
badly
.
For instance
, there is accessibility to eat from outside at a door step and in this type of situation who will bother to cook at home,
even though
outside food is unhealthy.

However
, every obstacle has a solution and this issue can
also
be sorted
. The best solution is the self-motivation. There is a need that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should realize the value of healthy
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eating
, if they do
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so
then the trouble will
be resolved
.
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But
for this, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should run more campaigns, not
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only
with the benefits of healthy
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eating
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
with effects of unhealthy eating.

To conclude
, in my viewpoint, this problem is a matter of concern, as it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
with more craze in new generation which will affect society more
negatively
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, if individual and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
both takes action to curb this affair, it can
be eliminated
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before
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
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deep rooted
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays many people eat very badly in spite of the information, which is available about ways to have a health, balanced diet. What could be the possible causes of this? Suggest some solutions which may improve the eating habits of the young. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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