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Many working people get little or no exercise during the workday or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do many people do not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? v.7

In recent times, there has been an urge to climb up the corporate ladder sooner which has led to employees spending huge amounts of time at work leaving them no time for any physical activity. Due to which majority of the working class people have been facing health issues sooner than in later years. In this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons for this concern and also elaborate feasible solutions. To start with, new technology has given humans the medium to interact without physically moving to another location. There are virtual teleconferencing and meetings wherein people from different geographies can communicate without having to move from their desks. Secondly they are obsessed with completing their tasks and working overtime to achieve monetary gains. All this had led to a sedentary lifestyle; leaving no or little time for people for physical activity. To illustrate, it has been found that 80% of all workers tend to spend 6 hours at a stretch on desk and with very little to no movement. Having said that, people need to understand the health complications that can arise of these habits. The most common being, lower back issues and eye fatigue which is a result of sitting long hours glaring into their computers without any breaks. Organisations need to recognise these concerns and develop policies and physical training sessions for employee welfare. To exemplify airlines companies, have weight limitations this ensures that staff do not gain excess weight and are fit for work. Some companies issue gym membership and organise sports tournaments for their employees. To recapitulate, the employers and employees need to acknowledge the side effects of spending long hours at work. They need to start introducing some form of physical activity in their mundane lifestyle to have healthy balance life.
In recent
times
, there has been an urge to climb up the corporate ladder sooner which has led to employees spending huge amounts of
time
at work leaving them no
time
for any
physical
activity. Due to which majority of the working
class
people
have been facing health issues sooner than in later years. In this essay, I will discuss the possible reasons for this concern and
also
elaborate feasible solutions.

To
start
with, new technology has
given
humans the medium to interact without
physically
moving to another location. There are virtual teleconferencing and meetings wherein
people
from
different
geographies can communicate without having to
move
from their desks.
Secondly
they
are obsessed
with completing their tasks and working overtime to achieve monetary gains. All this had led to a sedentary lifestyle; leaving no or
little
time
for
people
for
physical
activity. To illustrate, it has
been found
that 80% of all workers tend to spend 6 hours at a stretch on desk and with
very
little
to no movement.

Having said that,
people
need
to understand the health complications that can arise of these habits. The most common being, lower back issues and eye fatigue which is a result of sitting long hours glaring into their computers without any breaks. Organisations
need
to recognise these concerns and develop policies and
physical
training sessions for employee welfare. To exemplify airlines
companies
, have weight limitations this ensures that staff do not gain excess weight and
are fit
for work.
Some
companies
issue gym membership and organise sports tournaments for their employees.

To recapitulate, the employers and employees
need
to acknowledge the side effects of spending long hours at work. They
need
to
start
introducing
some
form of
physical
activity in their mundane lifestyle to have healthy balance life.
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IELTS essay Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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