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Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.1

Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1
Nowadays, large companies which are mostly multinationals, have dedicated large budgets for their marketing expenditures. As a result, the marketing activities conducted by such firms eventually attract the potential buyers leaving local business mostly empty handed. In this essay, I will not only illustrate the perils of this scenario to the society, but also the possible solutions and strategies to inspire folks to buy their homeland products. To begin with, whenever citizens of any country start buying imported products from large multinational companies, it will result in an outflow of foreign exchange and depletion of foreign reserves, which eventually causes a deficit in the balance of trade to elevate and national currency to devalue. Furthermore, extensive marketing and promotions usually exaggerated the value of any commodity and people are somewhat compelled to buy them unnecessarily. According to a study, 80% of the people who default on their credit cards mentioned that they have developed a habit of buying expensive items from large companies which consumes all of their lifelong savings. On the other hand, in order to boost up local business sale, campaigns should be launched to encourage people to buy locally produced goods. People should be made aware of the fact that they are actually helping their country and society at large. To exemplify, if people start buying local products, it will help local business to grow, which will create multiple job opportunities in the society. In addition to that, government should promote local business by providing them subsidies financing options and also restrict large companies to influence the consumer behaviour by establishing SOP’s. To recapitulate, it is essential to buy maximum possible products from local vendors so that not only they become stronger but also our country becomes stronger economically in the world.
Nowadays,
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large
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companies
which are
mostly
multinationals, have dedicated
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large
budgets for their marketing expenditures.
As a result
, the marketing activities conducted by such firms
eventually
attract the potential buyers leaving
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local
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business
mostly
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
empty handed
. In this essay, I will not
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only
illustrate the perils of this scenario to the society,
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but
also
the possible solutions and strategies to inspire folks to
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buy
their homeland products.

To
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begin
with, whenever citizens of any country
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start
buying imported products from
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large
multinational
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companies
, it will result in an outflow of foreign exchange and depletion of foreign reserves, which
eventually
causes a deficit in the balance of trade to elevate and national currency to devalue.
Furthermore
, extensive marketing and promotions
usually
exaggerated the value of any commodity and
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people
are somewhat compelled to
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buy
them
unnecessarily
. According to a study, 80% of the
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people
who default on their credit cards mentioned that they have developed a habit of buying expensive items from
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large
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companies
which consumes all of their lifelong savings.

On the other hand
, in order to boost up
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local
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business
sale, campaigns should
be launched
to encourage
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people
to
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buy
locally
produced
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
.
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People
should
be made
aware of the fact that they are actually helping their country and society at
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large
. To exemplify, if
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people
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start
buying
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local
products, it will
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help
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local
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business
to grow, which will create multiple job opportunities in the society.
In addition
to that,
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government
should promote
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local
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business
by providing them subsidies financing options and
also
restrict
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large
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companies
to influence the consumer
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
by establishing SOP’s.

To recapitulate, it is essential to
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buy
maximum possible products from
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local
vendors
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so
that not
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only
they become stronger
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but
also
our country becomes stronger
economically
in the world.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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