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#63 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v.1

#63 Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v. 1
Migrating to developed countries for higher education has been increasing since past few years. It has been seen many students prefer to look after foreign countries for enhancing their knowledge and skills. Somewhere, a high quality learning is always seeking attention of foreign students and proves to be beneficial for them both on the social and economic basis. However, there are many downsides of this aspect, which we will discuss about in this essay. Studying abroad is a tool to develop proficiency in specialised sector, which resulted in qualitative man power. It’s an excellent way of having exposure to qualitative teaching with streamlined study module and structure. Moreover, several developing countries invest huge amount of funds as a grant in young people who has the calibre and potential, which in return becomes an efficient manpower. But, it has few drawbacks, cannot be overlooked. Sometimes, it is seen the theories and teaching methods a person learns in abroad cannot be compatible with host country due to diverse geographical, cultural and behavioural system. For illustration, Finland’s theory of free and fully funded education and exam less system cannot be introduced in India because of the large population and having 50 students in a class. Secondly, it can be observed through graphical figures that students studying abroad do not get back to their home country; consequently, it hampers the expectation of society and family as well as the country. There are many examples of Indian students who study abroad and never get back due to unusual cultures in their home province. Therefore, we can say the student enrolling for courses in other countries have been inclining at a rapid pace. It has many benefits, but few drawbacks too. Furthermore, a harmony must be established for better coordination before coming to a decision.
Migrating to developed
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countries
for higher education has been increasing since past few years. It has been
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seen
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many
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students
prefer to look after foreign
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countries
for enhancing their knowledge and
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skills
. Somewhere, a high quality learning is always seeking attention of foreign
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students
and proves to be beneficial for them both on the social and
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economic
basis.
However
, there are
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many
downsides of this aspect, which we will
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discuss about in
this essay.

Studying
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abroad
is a tool to develop proficiency in
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specialised
sector, which resulted in qualitative
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man
power. It’s an excellent way of having exposure to qualitative teaching with streamlined study module and structure.
Moreover
, several developing
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countries
invest huge amount of funds as a grant in young
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people
who
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has
the
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calibre
and potential, which in return becomes an efficient manpower.

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But
, it has few drawbacks, cannot
be overlooked
.
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Sometimes
, it is
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seen
the theories and teaching methods a person learns in
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abroad
cannot be compatible with host
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country
due to diverse geographical, cultural and
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behavioural
system. For illustration, Finland’s theory of free and
fully
funded education and exam less system cannot
be introduced
in India
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because
of the large population and having 50
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students
in a
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class
.
Secondly
, it can
be observed
through graphical figures that
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students
studying
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abroad
do not
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get
back to their home
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country
;
consequently
, it hampers the expectation of society and family
as well
as the
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country
. There are
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many
examples of Indian
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students
who study
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abroad
and never
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get
back due to unusual cultures in their home province.

Therefore
, we can say the
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student
enrolling for courses in other
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countries
have been inclining at a rapid pace. It has
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many
benefits,
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but
few drawbacks too.
Furthermore
, a harmony
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must
be established
for better coordination
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before
coming to a decision.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay #63 Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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