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Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. with this statement? v. 1
It is argued that students are required to study many subjects, while some of subjects they are not interests in. Therefore, it is believed this situation is a waste time. I disagree because some courses are essential when finding employment, and some are important for students to protect themselves. Although some people agree that it is not necessary for students to study subjects which they dislike, I believe that spending time on school subjects is important for students’ employment. This is to say that students who attend school courses can gain knowledge lead to better employment opportunities. For example, while some students are unwillingness to learn English, English is a compulsory course in China and students are constantly told that mastering English is a gateway to high salaries. Students may feel stressed to study some subjects such as math, whereas these subjects help students to develop analytical and problem-solving skills, which regarded as essential skills in workplace. That is why these subjects can be beneficial to students’ future employment, even if these courses seem to be difficult for students to learn. Another reason of my view is that some subjects are crucial for students to learn how to protect themselves. This is because the aim of some subjects such is to develop students’ ability with self-defense. For example, achieving a black belt in karate Japan is a mandatory class for every student. Perhaps students find is not relevant to their academic study, but such training can help them to protect themselves from violence and crimes. If students do not attend these classes, they would not know how to deal with danger situation in their life. Therefore, it is necessary to study these subject because students can handle with unforeseen by their own. In conclusion, I strong believe every subject is worth studying because these subjects provide students with opportunities to their employment prospects and help them learn keep them safety.
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they are not interests in.
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is believed
this situation is a waste time. I disagree
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are essential when finding
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employment
, and
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some
are
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important
for
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students
to protect themselves.

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some
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people
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agree
that it is not necessary for
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students
to
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study
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subjects
which they dislike, I believe that spending time on school
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subjects
is
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important
for
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students’
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employment
. This is to say that
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students
who attend school
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courses
can gain knowledge lead to better
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employment
opportunities.
For example
, while
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some
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students
are unwillingness to learn English, English is a compulsory
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course
in China and
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students
are
constantly
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told
that mastering English is a gateway to high salaries.
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may feel
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stressed
to
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study
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some
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subjects
such as math, whereas these
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subjects
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help
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students
to develop analytical and problem-solving
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skills
, which regarded as essential
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skills
in workplace.
That is
why these
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subjects
can be beneficial to
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students’
future
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employment
, even if these
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courses
seem to be difficult for
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students
to learn.

Another reason of my view is that
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some
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subjects
are crucial for
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students
to learn how to protect themselves. This is
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because
the aim of
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some
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subjects
such is to develop
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students’
ability with self-defense.
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, achieving a black belt in karate Japan is a mandatory
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class
for every
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student
. Perhaps
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students
find is not relevant to their academic
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study
,
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but
such training can
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help
them to protect themselves from violence and crimes. If
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students
do not attend these classes, they would not know how to deal with
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danger
situation in their life.
Therefore
, it is necessary to
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study
these
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subject
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because
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students
can handle with unforeseen by their
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own
.

In conclusion
, I strong
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believe
every
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subject
is worth studying
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because
these
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subjects
provide
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students
with opportunities to their
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employment
prospects and
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help
them learn
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keep
them safety.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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