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Many students have to study subjects they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Many students have to study subjects they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. with this statement? v. 2
Some people believe that some students need to attend to the courses that they do not even like them, while others dismiss them as a waste of time. Although there are a number of drawbacks involved in this trend, the benefits accruing to the students who participate in these classes are by no means negligible. Admittedly, I believe that students gain more knowledge by participating in these classes. On the one hand, supporters of the idea that students do not need to participate in the classes are advocate that these classes are wasteful by nature. To begin with, the more students attend to the classes they do not like, the more they hate the school and the sciences as a whole. Hating the subjects, the students are likely to get low mark in it due to the fact that they do not like to study that subject. Thus, this will lead to have a sense of discouraged and hate; not only from the school, itself, but also from the whole science and studying as well. On the other hand, some individuals believe that learning the subjects that some students do not like have a far-reaching positive impact on their future lives. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that were students not to attend any course they did not like, they would face with a lot of problems in the course of living. That is to say, they are bound to learn that they have to fight and deal with most of things they do not like, and this would be a good example of that. Therefore, this kind of courses will lay the groundwork for them to be prepared to deal with most of the problems or even people who they hate. Moreover, some students may say that sometimes little by little, not only are they live that course, but also they want to attend to more advanced classes. To sum up, attending to the courses in which students hate, can be both rewarding and problematic; however, I believe that the disadvantages are likely take their toll on those who are not sign up for the courses in which they are not like.
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students
need to
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attend
to the
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courses
that they do not even like them, while others dismiss them as a waste of time. Although there are a number of drawbacks involved in this trend, the benefits accruing to the
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students
who participate in these
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classes
are by no means negligible.
Admittedly
, I
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believe
that
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students
gain more knowledge by participating in these classes.

On the one hand, supporters of the
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idea
that
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students
do not need to participate in the
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classes
are advocate that these
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classes
are wasteful by nature. To
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with, the more
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students
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attend
to the
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classes
they do not like, the more they
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hate
the school and the sciences as a whole. Hating the subjects, the
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students
are likely to
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get
low mark in it due to the fact that they do not like to study that subject.
Thus
, this will lead to have a sense of discouraged and
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hate
; not
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from the school, itself,
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also
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as well
.

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,
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some
individuals
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believe
that learning the subjects that
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some
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students
do not like have a far-reaching
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positive
impact on their future
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lives
. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that were
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students
not to
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attend
any
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course
they did not like, they would face with
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problems in the
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course
of living.
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to say, they
are bound
to learn that they
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have to
fight and deal with
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most of things
they do not like, and this would be a
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good
example of that.
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, this kind of
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courses
will lay the groundwork for them to
be prepared
to deal with most of the problems or even
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people
who they
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hate
.
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,
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some
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students
may say that
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, not
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are they
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that
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course
,
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also
they want to
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attend
to more advanced classes.

To sum up, attending to the
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courses
in which
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students
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hate
, can be both rewarding and problematic;
however
, I
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believe
that the disadvantages are likely take their toll on those who are not
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sign
up for the
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courses
in which they are not like.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many students have to study subjects they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. with this statement? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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