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Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. v. 2
Education is such a possession which never lets the possessor down. It does pay back in some way or the other. It is due to this reason that it is kept at a very high pedestal and only contributes to the widening of the horizon of the possessor. Due to this firm fact, it can be said that education earned by studying any kind of subjects is never ever a waste of time. It only adds up to the total personality of an individual and makes him a matured, understanding and a complete human being. However, there are other schools of thoughts who are of the view that the pupils must not be taught the subjects in which they have no interest in. According to their belief, this only contributes towards the wastage of time. They believe in the theory that the students must be made to study the subjects which are liked by the students. Unfortunately, the followers of the second school of thought invariably tend to forget the fact that the thought process of a student is too narrow, too limited due to the immaturity level where the student tends to stand at such a tender age. The mind of a student is just like a clay which can be moulded in either way. In such a scenario, if the child is given the freedom to study the subjects according to their liking, the changes of a tender mind to get lost in the world of fantasy would lead the nation towards a horrific and unpleasant future. The mind of a student is as holy as Bible, as sacred as temple and if such a mind is guided in the right direction, by making him understand the potential of education possessed
Education is such a possession which never
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lets
the possessor down. It does pay back in
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some
way or the other. It is due to this reason that it is
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kept
at a
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very
high pedestal and
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only
contributes to the widening of the horizon of the possessor. Due to this firm fact, it can
be said
that education earned by studying any kind of
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subjects
is never ever a waste of time. It
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only
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adds
up to the total personality of an individual and
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makes
him a matured, understanding and a complete human being.

However
, there are other schools of thoughts who are of the view that the pupils
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must
not
be taught
the
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subjects
in which they have no interest in. According to their belief, this
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only
contributes towards the wastage of time. They believe in the theory that the
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students
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must
be made
to study the
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subjects
which
are liked
by the students.

Unfortunately, the followers of the second school of
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thought
invariably
tend to forget the fact that the
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thought
process of a
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student
is too narrow, too limited due to the immaturity level where the
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student
tends to stand at such a tender age. The
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mind
of a
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student
is
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just
like a clay which can be
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moulded
in either way. In such a scenario, if the child is
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given
the freedom to study the
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subjects
according to their liking, the
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changes
of a tender
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mind
to
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get
lost in the world of fantasy would lead the nation towards a horrific and unpleasant future.

The
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mind
of a
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student
is as holy as Bible, as sacred as temple and if such a
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mind
is guided
in the right direction, by making him understand the potential of education possessed
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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