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Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university. What are some of the important qualities of a good roommate? Use specific reasons and examples to explain why these qualities are important. v.2

Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university. What are some of the important qualities of a good roommate? Use specific reasons and examples to explain why these qualities are important. v. 2
International sports, such as NBA basketball games and World Cup football games, are usually hosted in different countries every several years. Getting permission to host an international event has become an apparent way to increase a country’s international image. While some people think that hosting worldwide sports events could sometimes be costly, I would argue that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Hosting international sports events could boost the host country’s economy. Taking the Olympic Games as an illustration, with its audiences all over the world, media groups in different countries would have to purchase the broadcasting licenses from the host country to air the Olympic programs to local audiences. Thus, it is a profitable business for a host country. Besides, international sports events usually attract a huge amount of tourists. Hundreds of thousands of sports fans would flood into the host country and significantly contribute to the tourism, retail, and transportation sectors. As a result, more foreign investment would be attracted and more local seasonal job opportunities would be created. The economic benefits it brings are foreseeable. Furthermore, hosting international sports would have a positive long-term social impact. Normally, a host country would renovate out-dated sports stadiums and build new infrastructures, for example, bridges, roads, and public transportations, to get prepared for the events. By having a better infrastructure system, the living standard of local citizens would increase in the long run. In conclusion, while I realize there are some drawbacks of hosting international events such as the pollution that comes with tourism. However, I consider the advantages are more significant and could benefit the host country overall.
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countries
every several years. Getting permission to
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host
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international
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event
has become an apparent way to increase a
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country’s
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international
image. While
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people
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that hosting worldwide
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events
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be costly, I would argue that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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events
could boost the
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country’s
economy. Taking the Olympic Games as an illustration, with its audiences all over the world, media groups in
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purchase
the broadcasting licenses from the
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to air the Olympic programs to local audiences.
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attract a huge amount of tourists. Hundreds of thousands of
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fans would flood into the
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and
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. The economic benefits it brings are foreseeable.

Furthermore
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would have a
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positive
long-term social impact.
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host
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country
would renovate out-dated
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sports
stadiums and build new infrastructures,
for example
, bridges, roads, and public transportations, to
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get
prepared for the
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events
. By having a better infrastructure system, the living standard of local citizens would increase in the long run.

In conclusion
, while I realize there are
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some
drawbacks of hosting
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international
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such as the pollution that
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comes
with tourism.
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, I consider the advantages are more significant and could benefit the
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overall
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IELTS essay Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university. What are some of the important qualities of a good roommate? Use specific reasons and examples to explain why these qualities are important. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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