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People think that countries should produce food their population eats and import less food as much as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

People think that countries should produce food their population eats and import less food as much as possible. v. 1
According to some people government should diminish the imported food products and strive to fulfil the people's demands by increasing local food production. I completely agree with the given idea mentioned above. Food is a vital element in people's life as water that is why it should be a priority for governments to meet local demand. There are several benefits of such economic policy. Firstly, by establishing or increasing agricultural facilities countries terminate the dependance on neighbour states and they can guarantee themselves from unexpected situations, such as war or natural disasters. The obstruction of agricultural infrastructures takes a long time to be ready, that is why countries would not have sufficient time to erect food production facilities when they encountered with the aforementioned situation. For example, until 2012 the trade amount of food products between Turkey and Russia was significantly greater and almost 80 percent of Russian food industry was depended on Turkey and most of the vegetables and fruits were turkish products. But in 2012 there was a jet crisis between these countries and due to that the relation between the 2 states stopped and Russia made an embargo for turkish products. Then the prices were dramatically raised in Russia due to the lack of food. Secondly, unemployment rates would be declined by creating food industry. Since ancient ages people have worked on farms and sown areas. Despite the technological advancement, today there are high workforce demand for agriculture. To put in another way, countries can create job opportunities for residents at the same time with ensuring it is internal demand. Additionally, as the local production are increasing countries get an opportunity to export excessive products. In conclusion, I completely believe that there is no point importing food products while every country has a potential to erect healthier and safer food industry.
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people
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government
should diminish the imported
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food
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products
and strive to fulfil the
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people
's
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demands
by increasing local
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food
production. I completely
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agree
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given
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idea
mentioned above.

Food is a vital element in
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people
's life as water
that is
why it should be a priority for
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governments
to
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meet
local
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demand
. There are several benefits of such economic policy.
Firstly
, by establishing or increasing agricultural facilities
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countries
terminate the
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dependance
on
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neighbour
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states and
they can guarantee themselves from unexpected situations, such as war or natural disasters. The obstruction of agricultural infrastructures takes a long time to be ready,
that is
why
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countries
would not have sufficient time to erect
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food
production facilities when they encountered with the aforementioned situation.
For example
, until 2012 the trade amount of
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food
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products
between Turkey and Russia was
significantly
greater and almost 80 percent of Russian
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food
industry
was depended
on Turkey and most of the vegetables and fruits were
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turkish
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products
.
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But
in 2012 there was a jet crisis between these
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countries
and due to that the relation between the 2 states
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stopped
and Russia made an embargo for
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turkish
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products
. Then the prices were
dramatically
raised in Russia due to the lack of food.

Secondly
, unemployment rates would
be declined
by creating
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food
industry. Since ancient ages
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people
have worked on farms and sown areas. Despite the technological advancement,
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today
there are high workforce
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demand
for agriculture. To put in another way,
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countries
can create job opportunities for residents at the same time with ensuring it is internal
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demand
.
Additionally
, as the local production are increasing
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countries
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get
an opportunity to export excessive products.

In conclusion
, I completely believe that there is no point importing
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food
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products
while every
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country
has a potential to erect healthier and safer
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food
industry.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay People think that countries should produce food their population eats and import less food as much as possible. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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