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Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university. What are some of the important qualities of a good roommate? v.3

Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university. What are some of the important qualities of a good roommate? v. 3
Every student, during some parts of their education, especially while doing professional courses, has to stay away from home and live in a hostel accommodation. During this period, they share their rooms with other students. Roommates with certain qualities become ideal and others expect to have such roommates. In my opinion, a good roommate should be kind, understanding, open-minded, and free from any bad habit that would disturb the other members of the room. First and foremost, a good roommate should be kind and generous. He or she should be able to help the roommate when needed in their studies and give them mental support. There should not be any unnecessary fights or arguments. Moreover, he or she has to be understanding and friendly. Secondly, that person should not be selfish. As they live together, there should be an open-mindedness to share the facilities available equally between the two. For example, the time for using the bathroom, usage of night lamp for studies and so on. Lastly, a nice roommate should be free of any bad habits like smoking, gambling and drinking. It is quite often the fact that roommates with bad habit can influence others very fast since students spend most of the time with them and finally end up taking these habits to themselves. This, in turn, can have a very bad impact on their health, studies and characters. In conclusion, having a good roommate is essential for our professional and personal growth and as a roommate, we should also possess those qualities.
Every student, during
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parts of their education,
especially
while doing professional courses,
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has to
stay away from home and
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live
in a hostel accommodation. During this period, they share their rooms with
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other
students.
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Roommates
with certain qualities become ideal
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and others
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expect
to have such
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roommates
. In my opinion, a
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good
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roommate
should be kind, understanding, open-minded, and free from any
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bad
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habit
that would disturb the
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other
members of the room.

First
and foremost, a
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good
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roommate
should be kind and generous. He or she should be able to
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help
the
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roommate
when needed in their studies and give them mental support. There should not be any unnecessary fights or arguments.
Moreover
, he or she
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has to
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be understanding
and friendly.

Secondly
, that person should not be selfish. As they
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live
together, there should be an open-mindedness to share the facilities available
equally
between the two.
For example
, the time for using the bathroom, usage of night lamp for studies and
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so
on.

Lastly
, a nice
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roommate
should be free of any
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bad
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habits
like smoking, gambling and drinking. It is quite
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often
the fact that
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roommates
with
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bad
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habit
can influence others
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very
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fast
since students spend most of the time with them and
finally
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end
up taking these
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habits
to themselves. This, in turn, can have a
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very
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bad
impact on their health, studies and characters.

In conclusion
, having a
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good
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roommate
is essential for our professional and personal growth and as a
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roommate
, we should
also
possess those qualities.
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IELTS essay Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university. What are some of the important qualities of a good roommate? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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