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Many people try to look younger than their age. what are the causes people do this? Do you think is a good thing or bad thing? v.18

Many people try to look younger than their age. what are the causes people do this? Do you think is a good thing or bad thing? v. 18
At present, to be younger is very important aspect of many people. There are various ways people try to be younger such as staying fit, thought process similar to adolescents, etc. In my view, strongly believe this trend is good thing because it will help to live longer as well as prevent from various ageing diseases. Nowadays, many people at the age between 40 to 50 give more emphasis to be healthy and fit, which would make sure them to be younger. If people look obese along with white hair, then it resembles your old age. For instance, my uncle who is 50 going to fitness centres regularly and dyes his hair to ensure to be younger. Additionally, some change their thought process similar to youngsters at work locations in order to be mingle with team and to make sure that they are not old. Moreover, some parents will play with their children, to make sure that they have better communication with their kids, to reduce the age gap. At the moment, the trend to become younger is really vital for many parents. Most importantly, it will help them not to be lazy also prevent them from various old age diseases like diabetes and obesity. Furthermore, it has been believed that by being younger will create competitive spirit in work locations. Lastly, life will get frustrated when people think they are old, instead if they pretend to be younger then could engage in to various social initiatives. In conclusion, to look younger than their age is an extremely intricate process and it will do wonders for various people. This trend will benefit old people to live longer and stay away from dangerous illnesses.
At present, to be
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is
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important
aspect of
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many
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people
. There are
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various
ways
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people
try to be
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younger
such as staying fit,
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thought
process similar to adolescents, etc. In my view,
strongly
believe this trend is
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good
thing
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because
it will
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help
to
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live
longer
as well
as
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prevent
from
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various
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ageing
diseases.

Nowadays,
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many
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people
at the
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age
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 40 and 50".
between 40 to 50
give more emphasis to be healthy and fit, which would
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make
sure them to be
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younger
. If
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people
look obese along with white hair, then it resembles your
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old
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age
.
For instance
, my uncle who is 50 going to fitness
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centres
regularly
and dyes his hair to ensure to be
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younger
.
Additionally
,
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some
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change
their
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thought
process similar to youngsters at work locations in order to be
Consider using a past participle here: "mingled".
mingle
with team and to
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make
sure that they are not
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old
.
Moreover
,
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some
parents will play with their children, to
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make
sure that they have better communication with their kids, to
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reduce
the
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age
gap.

At the moment, the trend to become
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younger
is
really
vital for
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many
parents. Most
importantly
, it will
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help
them not to be lazy
also
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prevent
them from
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various
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old
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age
diseases like diabetes and obesity.
Furthermore
, it has
been believed
that by being
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younger
will create competitive spirit in work locations.
Lastly
, life will
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get
frustrated when
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people
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think
they are
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old
,
instead
if they pretend to be
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younger then
could engage in to
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various
social initiatives.

In conclusion
, to look
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younger
than their
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age
is an
extremely
intricate process and it will do wonders for
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various
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people
. This trend will benefit
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old
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people
to
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live
longer and stay away from
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dangerous
illnesses.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people try to look younger than their age. what are the causes people do this? Do you think is a good thing or bad thing? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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