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Many people think that students study course materials more effectively by taking exams, while others think that students learn more effective through doing other activities like completing projects, which one do you think is more effective? v.1

Many people think that students study course materials more effectively by taking exams, while others think that students learn more effective through doing other activities like completing projects, which one do you think is more effective? v. 1
Now-a-days, few individuals consider parenting courses as the rudimentary needs for raising their kids, whereas, others disobey with this argument. In my opinion, parenting is a tedious task and I certainly believe that parental courses are essential for parents in order to nurture their kids in an efficient manner. In this essay I will provide the reasons for my belief with the suitable examples. Firstly, Parenting is a unique experience to each and everyone in the world and the children's behaviour is directly related to the parental-guidance. Therefore, in order to nurture their kids efficiently, elders should enhance their teaching skills through these courses. For an instance, In a parental survey conducted in India during the last quarter of the year 2019, there were a plethora of responses from the public, which stated the hurdle's they faced in raising their kids due to the lack of knowledge. Secondly, parenting courses also enhance the bonding between the elder people and the younger one's. Parents with better parenting knowledge can certainly understand their kid internal intentions and act accordingly. Moreover, kids will also be more amicable to parents. Eventually this leads to a healthy relation between both of them. For an example, an interesting fact was revealed in a recent youth survey conducted in Hyderabad in August 2020, which disclosed the fact that kids have opted their parents as their best partners. In conclusion, I strongly believe that parental training courses are crucial for the parents as well as the children. These courses undoubtedly enhance the mutual bonding between both the parties.
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-a-days, few individuals consider
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parenting
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courses
as the rudimentary needs for raising their
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kids
, whereas, others disobey with this argument. In my opinion,
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parenting
is a tedious task and I
certainly
believe that parental
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courses
are essential for
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parents
in order to nurture their
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kids
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in an efficient manner
. In this essay I will provide the reasons for my belief with the suitable examples.

Firstly
,
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Parenting
is a unique experience to each and
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everyone
in the world and the children's
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behaviour
is
directly
related to the parental-guidance.
Therefore
, in order to nurture their
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kids
efficiently
, elders should enhance their teaching
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skills
through these
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courses
. For an instance, In a parental survey conducted
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India during the last quarter of the year 2019, there were a plethora of responses from the public, which stated the hurdle's they faced in raising their
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kids
due to the lack of knowledge.

Secondly
,
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parenting
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courses
also
enhance the bonding between the elder
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people
and the younger one's.

Parents with better
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parenting
knowledge can
certainly
understand their
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kid
internal intentions and act
accordingly
.
Moreover
,
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kids
will
also
be more amicable to
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parents
.
Eventually
this leads to a healthy relation between both of them. For an example, an interesting fact
was revealed
in a recent youth survey conducted in Hyderabad in August 2020, which disclosed the fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kids
have opted their
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parents
as their best partners.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that parental training
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courses
are crucial for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
as well
as the children. These
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courses
undoubtedly
enhance the mutual bonding between both the parties.
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IELTS essay Many people think that students study course materials more effectively by taking exams, while others think that students learn more effective through doing other activities like completing projects, which one do you think is more effective? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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