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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. Use specific reasons and examples to s v.82

When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. Use specific reasons and examples to s v. 82
We all desire to be famous and become a public personality, where everyone follow us on social media. However, few people think that celebrities should not be followed by media everywhere and their pictures should not be clicked or published without consent as it breach their privacy. While others find it as the price of their stardom. My essay below will describe why the media should not follow celebrities everywhere. India is the home of Bollywood and is known for selling dreams. People dream of becoming like stars they follow online, while people cannot personally meet celebrities, they like to follow them on social media. There is a whole world of people who are working continuously to get these celebrities interviewed or click a picture of them to put it online and make the followers updated about their start’s lifestyle and their schedules. Moreover, publishing about celebrities is providing jobs to the reporters and media industry, and it fosters opportunities in the entertainment industry. However, being followed by paparazzi has negative effect on the life of celebrities sometimes. False publicity or inappropriate pictures or rumours spread aggravate the situation for celebrities. They need to be super cautious while saying something or while doing anything as they might get clicked from nowhere. For instance, if a celebrity refuse to get clicked by a fan on road due to security concerns, medial perhaps publish it with false statements like “Rude behaviour”. You will not feel safe If you know someone is continuously following you and it might end up in depression as well. In conclusion, I want to pen down, saying that we all love our role models or celebrities and are very keen to know about their lives. We should show them our love by giving them privacy rather following them everywhere. They also deserve break from this life full of hassle and we should respect their privacy too, like ours.
We all desire to be
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famous
and become a public personality, where everyone
The pronoun 'everyone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "follows", "followed".
follow
us on social
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media
.
However
, few
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people
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think
that
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celebrities
should not
be followed
by
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media
everywhere and their pictures should not
be clicked
or published without consent as it breach their privacy. While others find it as the price of their stardom. My essay below will
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describe
why the
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media
should not
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follow
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celebrities
everywhere.

India is the home of Bollywood and
is known
for selling dreams.
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People
dream of becoming like stars they
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follow
online, while
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people
cannot
personally
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meet
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celebrities
, they like to
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follow
them on social
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media
. There is a whole world of
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people
who are working
continuously
to
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get
these
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celebrities
interviewed or click a picture of them to put it online and
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make
the followers updated about their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
’s lifestyle and their schedules.
Moreover
, publishing about
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celebrities
is providing jobs to the reporters and
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media
industry, and it fosters opportunities in the entertainment industry.

However
,
being followed
by paparazzi has
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negative
effect on the life of
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celebrities
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sometimes
. False publicity or inappropriate pictures or
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rumours
spread aggravate the situation for
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celebrities
. They need to be super cautious while saying something or while doing anything as they might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
clicked from nowhere.
For instance
, if a
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celebrity
refuse to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
clicked by a fan on road due to security concerns, medial perhaps publish it with false statements like “Rude
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
”. You will not feel safe If you know someone is
continuously
following you and it might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up in depression
as well
.

In conclusion
, I want to pen down, saying that we all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
our role models or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
celebrities
and are
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very
keen to know about their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. We should
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show
them our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
by giving them privacy
rather
following them everywhere. They
also
deserve break from this life full of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
hassle and
we should respect their privacy too, like ours.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. Use specific reasons and examples to s v. 82

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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