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Many people think it is important to protect the environment, but they make no effort on it themselves. Why is it so and what can be done about it? v.2

Many people think it is important to protect the environment, but they make no effort on it themselves. Why is it so and what can be done about it? v. 2
Few people think that prosperity, which belongs to abundance, position, honours or fame, can be achieved by hard work only while others think that prosperity in life is a matter of luck no matter how strong merit you have. This essay shall discuss that victory in the soul is not always earned rather it is a better stroke of life. Firstly, It is thought that intensive work is one and only way that brings a prosperity filled of fame, position and revenue. Though it is true that intensive work is the way that leads someone to become a leader, however it is not true all the time. People who participate and take advantage of right opportunity always get benefited even though they have less qualifications than other ones who are highly qualified but with a zero success rate. Hence; therefore, accomplishment can also be achieved by active participation at right place. Secondly, cash has less correlation with merit. Many people who are meritorious but unsuccessful; however, others who possess less merit are successful which shows that success is luck rather than hard work. In daily life most of the people earn fame even though they are unqualified persons than those who have good knowledge and expensive degrees. For example, Mr Khoso, a social media star, is an illiterate person, but it possesses tens of thousands of fans following over social media and YouTube that not only earns him good enough money but popularity as well. Finally, that's why hard work works sometimes, but luckily works all the time. In conclusion, it is obvious that to gain treasure, position and honours you need to work hard but not all the time. In some ways success depends on person's participation no matter he is qualified or unqualified.
Few
people
think
that prosperity, which belongs to abundance, position,
honours
or fame, can
be achieved
by
hard
work
only
while others
think
that prosperity in life is a matter of luck no matter how strong merit you have. This essay shall discuss that victory in the soul is not always earned
rather
it is a better stroke of life.

Firstly
, It is
thought
that intensive
work
is one and
only
way that brings a prosperity filled of fame, position and revenue. Though it is true that intensive
work
is the way that leads someone to become a leader,
however
it is not true all the time.
People
who
participate and take advantage of right opportunity always
get
benefited
even though
they have
less
qualifications than other ones
who
are
highly
qualified
but
with a zero success rate.
Hence
;
therefore
, accomplishment can
also
be achieved
by active participation at right place.

Secondly
, cash has less correlation with merit.
Many
people
who
are meritorious
but
unsuccessful;
however
, others
who
possess less merit are successful which
shows
that success is luck
rather
than
hard
work
. In daily life most of the
people
earn fame
even though
they
are unqualified
persons than those
who
have
good
knowledge and expensive degrees.
For example
, Mr
Khoso
, a social media star, is an illiterate person,
but
it possesses tens of thousands of fans following over social media and YouTube that not
only
earns him
good
enough
money
but
popularity
as well
.

Finally
, that's why
hard
work
works
sometimes
,
but
luckily works all the time.
In conclusion
, it is obvious that to gain treasure, position and
honours
you need to
work
hard
but
not all the time. In
some
ways
success depends on person's participation no matter he
is qualified
or unqualified.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people think it is important to protect the environment, but they make no effort on it themselves. Why is it so and what can be done about it? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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