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What is global warming? Discuss the reasons and effects of this phenomenon. Suggest some solutions for this problem. v.1

What is global warming? Discuss the reasons and effects of this phenomenon. Suggest some solutions for this problem. v. 1
While, certain individuals believe that it is suitable for people to accept unfavourable situations, other opine that they should try harder to make their conditions and situations favourable. This essay will discuss both views and further, agrees that people should work more in order to improve their conditions and get the jobs that matched their skills and erudition. It is clear that some people accept unnecessary jobs or low salaries because of the bad economic conditions prevailing in the market. This is to say, the economic downturn in the country can lead to either availability of less job opportunities available in the market or those available offers low pay scale. As a result, people have to accept dissatisfying jobs that are available in the market. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times showed that the economic loss in March 2019 in India caused people to accept undesirable jobs and with lower pay income for people. However, some people disagree and opine that people should try hard to get the employment opportunities that not only offers desirable positions but are also handsome salaries. In other words, people should try every opportunity and aspects available to get the job that is in accordance with their capabilities and skills, which will help in their overall growth in personality and career. As a consequence, people will work with more efficiency and effectiveness in the organisation. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The New York Times showed that more than 80 percent of people try hard to get jobs that favour their expertise and knowledge. To conclude, even though, some people feel that people should take jobs that offers low income and substandard situations, nevertheless, In my opinion, I vehemently agree that people should work hard to get the opportunities favouring their skills as well as higher salaries.
While, certain individuals believe that it is suitable for
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people
to
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accept
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situations, other opine that they should try harder to
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make
their conditions and situations
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favourable
. This essay will discuss both views and
further
,
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agrees
that
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people
should work more in order to
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improve
their conditions and
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get
the
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jobs
that matched their
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skills
and erudition.

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clear
that
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some
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people
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accept
unnecessary
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jobs
or low salaries
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because
of the
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bad
economic conditions prevailing in the market. This is to say, the economic downturn in the country can lead to either availability of less
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job
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opportunities
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available
in the market or those
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available
offers low pay scale.
As a result
,
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people
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have to
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accept
dissatisfying
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jobs
that are
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available
in the market. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times
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showed
that the economic loss in March 2019 in India caused
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people
to
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accept
undesirable
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jobs
and with lower pay income for
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people
.

However
,
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some
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people
disagree and opine that
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people
should try
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hard
to
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get
the employment
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opportunities
that not
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only
offers desirable positions
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but
are
also
handsome salaries.
In other words
,
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people
should try every
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opportunity
and aspects
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available
to
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get
the
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job
that is
in accordance with their capabilities and
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skills
, which will
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help
in their
overall
growth in personality and career. As a consequence,
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people
will work with more efficiency and effectiveness in the
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organisation
. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The New York Times
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showed
that more than 80 percent of
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people
try
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hard
to
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get
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jobs
that
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favour
their expertise and knowledge.

To conclude
,
even though
,
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some
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people
feel that
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people
should take
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jobs
that offers low income and substandard situations,
nevertheless
, In my opinion, I
vehemently
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agree
that
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people
should work
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hard
to
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get
the
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opportunities
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favouring
their
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skills
as well
as higher salaries.
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IELTS essay What is global warming? Discuss the reasons and effects of this phenomenon. Suggest some solutions for this problem. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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