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There is growing tendency that acquiring foreign language has gained increasingly popularity in almost corners of the world, aiming to travelling and opening job opportunities in other regions. However I contend that some other benefits from studying fore v.1

There is growing tendency that acquiring foreign language has gained increasingly popularity in almost corners of the world, aiming to travelling and opening job opportunities in other regions. However I contend that some other benefits from studying fore v. 1
Inventions are a result of research which is aimed at improving the standard of life. They increase comfort and convenience. Some people argue that modern innovations have created more problems than solutions. However, I disagree with this argument. I believe it is about how people use technology. I will support my stand with examples in this essay. Some people say that the nuclear bomb was the best example of the destructive power of science. They forget that the original intention of this research was to generate electricity from nuclear fusion. However, this technology was misused to develop a nuclear bomb. Another example of the negative effects of technology is pollution caused by the burning of fossil fuels. Some people argue that ozone layer depletion and global warming are caused by pollution. They forget that eco-friendly alternatives like wind energy and solar energy are also the result of innovations and can be used to operate machines. It is the responsibility of people to use cleaner sources of energy instead of fossil fuels to protect the climate. A few people claim that computers and the internet are making the lifestyle of youth sedentary which is harmful in the long run. Today’s young people spend more time on social networking website than meeting friends and relatives in person. However, it is about discipline and usage, which should be controlled by individuals. Inventions should not be held responsible for this. In conclusion, modern inventions are beneficial and make our lives safer, easier and more comfortable. It is up to the individuals to decide how they should use technology. Overuse and lack of control mechanisms are the main drivers of mishaps.
Inventions are a result of research which
is aimed
at improving the standard of life. They increase comfort and convenience.
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Some
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argue that modern innovations have created more problems than solutions.
However
, I disagree with this argument. I believe it is about how
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people
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use
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technology
. I will support my stand with examples in this essay.

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Some
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people
say that the nuclear bomb was the best example of the destructive power of science. They forget that the original intention of this research was to generate electricity from nuclear fusion.
However
, this
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technology
was misused
to develop a nuclear bomb.

Another example of the
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negative
effects of
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technology
is pollution caused by the burning of fossil fuels.
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Some
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people
argue that ozone layer depletion and global warming
are caused
by pollution. They forget that eco-friendly alternatives like wind energy and solar energy are
also
the result of innovations and can be
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used
to operate machines. It is the responsibility of
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people
to
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use
cleaner sources of energy
instead
of fossil fuels to protect the climate.

A few
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people
claim that computers and the internet are making the lifestyle of youth sedentary which is harmful in the long run.
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Today
’s young
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people
spend more time on social networking website than meeting friends and relatives in person.
However
, it is about discipline and usage, which should
be controlled
by individuals. Inventions should not
be held
responsible for this.

In conclusion
, modern inventions are beneficial and
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make
our
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lives
safer, easier and more comfortable. It is up to the individuals to decide how they should
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use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
. Overuse and lack of control mechanisms are the main drivers of mishaps.
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IELTS essay There is growing tendency that acquiring foreign language has gained increasingly popularity in almost corners of the world, aiming to travelling and opening job opportunities in other regions. However I contend that some other benefits from studying fore v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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