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Many people believe that it is important to protect the environment but they make no effort to protect it themselves Why do you think it is the case What actions do you think that individuals can do to protect the environment v.5

Many people believe that it is important to protect the environment but they make no effort to protect it themselves Why do you think it is the case What actions do you think that individuals can do to protect the environment v. 5
Protect the environment is an obligation to all humans, and humans should be responsible for a variety of environmental problems. Unfortunately, plenty of people do nothing about it although they have realized the importance of protecting the environment. There are several reasons for it and I will further elaborate in this essay. Nevertheless, I believe possible measures could be taken into account to tackle this issue. To begin with, the lack of environmental awareness is the main reason for this phenomenon. Some people have no idea that some of their careless daily behaviors could have devastating effects on the planet. For instance, it is common to see people using over-packaged products, while most of these packages are made in plastics. However, plastic is a non-degradable material and it takes hundreds of years for to be degraded. Furthermore, selfishness also contributes to non-environmental behaviors. For self-centered people, their own benefits and conveniences are the primary concerns and they pin their hopes on others to improve this world. Moreover, this attitude will negatively influence on other people especially to their children, since children are likely to imitate adults. Several measures could be done to address this problem. Firstly, individuals can take public transport rather than driving to reduce the emissions from private vehicles. Secondly, they can choose products with less packaging or products with degradable materials to reduce the impact of non-degradable materials. In addition, households can use several rubbish bins to garbage classification, thus, useful materials can be recycled and reused in order to save energy and raw materials. In conclusion, people lack actions to protect the environment because they lack environmental awareness and being selfish. Nevertheless, individuals are able to make contribution to make this planet better.
Protect the environment is an obligation to all humans, and humans should be responsible for a variety of environmental problems. Unfortunately,
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plenty
of
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people
do nothing about it although they have realized the importance of protecting the environment. There are several reasons for it and I will
further
elaborate in this essay.
Nevertheless
, I believe possible measures could
be taken
into account to tackle this issue.

To
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begin
with, the lack of environmental awareness is the main reason for this phenomenon.
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Some
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people
have no
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idea
that
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some
of their careless daily behaviors could have devastating effects on the planet.
For instance
, it is common to
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see
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people
using over-packaged products, while most of these packages
are made
in plastics.
However
, plastic is a non-degradable
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material
and it takes hundreds of years for to
be degraded
.
Furthermore
, selfishness
also
contributes to non-environmental behaviors. For self-centered
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people
, their
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own
benefits and conveniences are the primary
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concerns and
they pin their hopes on others to
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improve
this world.
Moreover
, this attitude will
negatively
influence on other
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people
especially
to their children, since children are likely to imitate adults.

Several measures could
be done
to address this problem.
Firstly
, individuals can take public transport
rather
than driving to
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reduce
the emissions from private vehicles.
Secondly
, they can choose products with less packaging or products with degradable
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materials
to
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reduce
the impact of non-degradable
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materials
.
In addition
, households can
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use
several rubbish bins to garbage classification,
thus
, useful
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materials
can
be recycled
and reused in order to save energy and raw materials.

In conclusion
,
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people
lack actions to protect the environment
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because
they lack environmental awareness and being selfish.
Nevertheless
, individuals are able to
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make
contribution to
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make
this planet better.
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10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people believe that it is important to protect the environment but they make no effort to protect it themselves Why do you think it is the case What actions do you think that individuals can do to protect the environment v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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