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Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments. v. 1
In recent years, the topic of experimenting on animals has been a controversial topic. Whilst some believe that testing health drugs on them is beneficial, others believe that is a violation of animal rights. Both views will be discussed before an opinion is reached. In order to try new medicines and drugs, it is essential that scientists have an experimental subject. However, as it is unethical to trial them on humans without knowing the side effects, lab technicians use animals. For example, since humans and primates are closely related, testing trial drugs on them will be beneficial as their reactions will be similar to us. For example, if any negative side effects occur as a result of the trial drug, then doctors will be able to provide advice before prescribing the medication. On the other hand, in the past years there has been a rise of animal activism. Animals, like us humans, are living organisms that are supposed to roam free in the wild. They are not meant to be taken into captivity and drugged. Therefore, many believe that it is unethical and immoral to trail new medication on them, as they also feel emotion. For example, experimenting on primate babies have shown to cause distress in parents. This proves that animals, like us homo sapiens, feel emotions. Hence, if it is unethical to test on humans the same should apply to animals. In conclusion, although testing on animals will show the harmful affects of certain antibiotics, I believe it goes against ethical and moral values of most humans and should not be acceptable.
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animals
has been a controversial topic. Whilst
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some
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believe
that testing health
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drugs
on them is beneficial, others
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believe
that is
a violation of
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animal
rights. Both views will
be discussed
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before
an opinion
is reached
.

In order to try new medicines and
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drugs
, it is essential that scientists have an experimental subject.
However
, as it is unethical to trial them on
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humans
without knowing the side effects, lab technicians
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use
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animals
.
For example
, since
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humans
and primates are
closely
related, testing trial
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drugs
on them will be beneficial as their reactions will be similar to us.
For example
, if any
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negative
side effects occur
as a result
of the trial
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drug
, then doctors will be able to provide advice
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before
prescribing the medication.

On the other hand
, in the past years there has been a rise of
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animal
activism.
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Animals
, like us
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humans
, are living organisms that
are supposed
to roam free in the wild. They are not meant to
be taken
into captivity and drugged.
Therefore
,
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many
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believe
that it is unethical and immoral to trail new medication on them, as they
also
feel emotion.
For example
, experimenting on primate babies have shown to cause distress in parents. This proves that
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animals
, like us homo sapiens, feel emotions.
Hence
, if it is unethical to
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test
on
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humans
the same should apply to animals.

In conclusion
, although testing on
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animals
will
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show
the harmful affects of certain antibiotics, I
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believe
it goes against ethical and moral values of most
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humans
and should not be acceptable.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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