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Many people say that they believe it is important to protect the environment but make no effort to do anything about it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What action do you think individuals should take to protect the environment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Many people say that they believe it is important to protect the environment but make no effort to do anything about it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What action do you think individuals should take to protect the environment? v. 1
Environment sanitation is very essential to being healthy, although many people find it difficult to maintain and keep their environment clean. This article will focus on the reason why environmental sanitation is mostly neglected, and possible measures to be carried out to ensure the environment is protected. It is often said that "health is wealth". Our health should be a priority in our life's. Keeping the environment clean always, is a big step to maintaining a healthy life, but unfortunately, many are too lazy or too busy to maintain their environment. Also, many people think it is the responsibility of the government to protect the environment. For example, in Malawi, more than 90 percent of the environmental disasters is caused by people living within the vicinity, who refused to maintain their environment. This disaster could have been avoided if proper measures had been taken to protect the environment. However, every individual must ensure that a proper schedule is set aside to protect the environment, and this must be strictly abided to. Also, the government has a big part to play, by making it mandatory for residents to keep their environment healthy and ensure they abide to these rules. For example, in Nigeria, the government set aside a particular day for environmental sanitation, and ensure that all workers across the country obey this rule. And this has been very effective so far. Therefore, I believe, if the government sets aside rules or a particular day for everyone to observe environmental sanitation, it will help each resident to maintain their busy schedule.
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IELTS essay Many people say that they believe it is important to protect the environment but make no effort to do anything about it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What action do you think individuals should take to protect the environment? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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