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Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. Discuss v.9

Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. Discuss v. 9
Nowadays, Companies are requiring a mix of university certification or in field experiences as job requirements. While many people argue that university education is the essential factor to get a job, others claim that experience is more important and the student should start working directly after completing high school education. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion. To begin with, there are several reasons why some people are considering university education is an important factor to get a job. Firstly, the universities are providing the student with all the required knowledge and information to understand the field requirements. This understanding shows the student the important element to success later in the professional career. For example, during the university, students will learn all the important topics and technologies in their field and use it later during their professional career. Secondly, companies either local or international are considering the university degree as a mandatory requirement to apply for a job. By doing this, they ensure that the applicant has the essential knowledge in the field and knows what is required to complete the job duties. On the other hand, some people believe that experiences are important and it is better to start working after school. To commence with, there are some jobs which don't require a university certificate, and experiences are the winning factor. For those jobs, any job seeker can apply directly after finishing school and start his professional career. For instance, car maintenance career does not require any university degree and worker can opt it directly after finishing school. Moreover, experiences provide the worker with plenty hand-on practical knowledge which is considered as an added value. Due to this fact, the worker knows what it is needed to do the job utilizing the minimum resources and time. To sum up, university degree is important to get a job, and it is a requirement for local and international companies. However, we should not ignore the importance of the experience and how it helps to open plenty of job options for the worker.
Nowadays,
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Companies
are requiring a mix of
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university
certification or in
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field
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experiences
as
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job
requirements. While
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many
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people
argue that
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university
education is the essential factor to
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get
a
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job
, others claim that
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experience
is more
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important
and the
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student
should
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start
working
directly
after completing high
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school
education. This essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and provide a conclusion.

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begin
with, there are several reasons why
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some
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people
are considering
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university
education is an
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important
factor to
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get
a
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job
.
Firstly
, the
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universities
are providing the
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student
with all the required knowledge and information to understand the
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field
requirements. This understanding
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shows
the
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student
the
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important
element to success later in the professional
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career
.
For example
, during the
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university
,
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students
will learn all the
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important
topics and technologies in their
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field
and
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use
it later during their professional
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career
.
Secondly
,
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companies
either local or international are considering the
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university
degree as a mandatory
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requirement
to apply for a
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job
. By doing this, they ensure that the applicant has the essential knowledge in the
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field
and knows what
is required
to complete the
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job
duties.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that
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experiences
are
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important
and it is better to
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start
working after
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school
. To commence with, there are
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some
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jobs
which don't require a
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university
certificate, and
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experiences
are the winning factor. For those
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jobs
, any
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job
seeker can apply
directly
after finishing
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school
and
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start
his professional
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career
.
For instance
, car maintenance
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career
does not require any
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university
degree and
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worker
can opt it
directly
after finishing
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school
.
Moreover
,
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experiences
provide the
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worker
with
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plenty
hand-on practical knowledge which
is considered
as an
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added
value. Due to this fact, the
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worker
knows what it
is needed
to do the
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job
utilizing the minimum resources and time.

To sum up,
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university
degree is
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important
to
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get
a
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job
, and it is a
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requirement
for local and international
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companies
.
However
, we should not
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ignore
the importance of the
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experience
and how it
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helps
to open
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plenty
of
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job
options for the
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worker
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. Discuss v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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