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Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. v.12

Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. v. 12
Decent employment is a necessity to lead a standard life for everyone. In the employment market, many people keep on various rules and cultures. The concept of a modern job has been on its transformation stage. Though many people express their opinion as it is better to start the job after school education, my two cents is the better employment opportunities turn up to the university graduation holders. One obvious reason is that critical skilled jobs such as medicine and information technology call for excellent academic backgrounds. To be more precise vast scientific and technological understanding is necessary for the betterment of these atypical jobs. University educations cater to the needs of these job requirements. Needless to say, only university graduates bring in these kinds of job skills go by the theoretical and practical curriculum. Over and above, advanced educations facilitate to not only horn the pupil's skills but also enlighten them in many ways. Graduates from Harvard and Cambridge universities are the hot ticket in the contemporary job market is the best epitome. Next, most of the countries public administration departments prefer to work with university graduates than school dropouts. In other words, graduation is the basic criterion for civil service jobs of most of the nations including the third world. It is a gospel truth that, well-informed people can easily break the deadlock of many public issues than others. It definitely helps to save money and resources of countries in many ways. So, the hand full of jobs with the handsome amount of money waiting for the university graduates around the world. Indian administrative service applicants’ basic qualification is mentioned as any graduation from the university is the best example. On the other hand, an army of people argues that the early works starts get better experiences in job settings. Perhaps it may be true to some degree but, unskilled workers do not have much demand in the job market. They really need to pull their socks up to find a good employment opportunity in existing word. Put it in a nutshell, the more training we achieved the less unemployed we are. The better employment opportunities are always for the well informed and university holders. A good education assures decent jobs in private and public work settings. So, practising this rule gives several folds positive result than just early starts work concept.
Decent
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employment
is a necessity to lead a standard life for everyone. In the
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employment
market,
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many
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people
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keep
on various
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rules
and cultures. The concept of a modern
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job
has been on its transformation stage. Though
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many
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people
express their opinion as it is
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better
to
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start
the
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job
after school
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education
, my two cents is the
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better
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employment
opportunities turn up to the
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university
graduation holders.

One obvious reason is that critical skilled
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jobs
such as medicine and information technology call for excellent academic backgrounds. To be more precise vast scientific and technological understanding is necessary for the betterment of these atypical
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jobs
.
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University
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educations
cater to the needs of these
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job
requirements. Needless to say,
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only
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university
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graduates
bring in these kinds of
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job
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skills
go by the theoretical and practical curriculum. Over and above, advanced
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educations
facilitate to not
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only
horn the pupil's
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skills
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but
also
enlighten them in
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many
ways.
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Graduates
from Harvard and Cambridge
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universities
are the hot ticket in the contemporary
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job
market is the best epitome.

Next
, most of the countries public administration departments prefer to
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work
with
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university
The verb 'to graduate' requires the preposition 'from': "graduates from".
graduates
than school dropouts.
In other words
, graduation is the basic criterion for civil service
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jobs
of most of the nations including the third world. It is a gospel truth that, well-informed
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people
can
easily
break the deadlock of
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many
public issues than others. It definitely
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helps
to save money and resources of countries in
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many
ways.
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So
, the hand full of
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jobs
with the handsome amount of money waiting for the
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university
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graduates
around the world. Indian administrative service applicants’ basic qualification
is mentioned
as any graduation from the
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university
is the best example.

On the other hand
, an army of
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people
argues that the early works
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starts
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get
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better
experiences in
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job
settings. Perhaps it may be true to
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some
degree
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but
, unskilled workers do not have much demand in the
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job
market. They
really
need to pull their socks up to find a
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good
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employment
opportunity in existing word.

Put it in a nutshell, the more training we achieved the less unemployed we are. The
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better
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employment
opportunities are always for the
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well informed
and
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university
holders. A
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good
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education
assures decent
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jobs
in private and public
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work
settings.
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So
,
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practising
this
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gives several folds
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positive
result than
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just
early
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starts
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work
concept.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. v. 12

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
394 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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