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Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family thant eating out in restaurants or canteens. do you agree or disagree? v.1

Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family thant eating out in restaurants or canteens. v. 1
A section of population believes that preparing meal and consuming at home is preferred over eating at food joints outside. I advocate this notion, as I believe that home cooked meal eaten at home brings more health benefits to an individual rather than at restaurant or canteens. I these modern times, cooking at home a meal for oneself has numerous long-term health benefits. In addition, one can prepare healthy food with less fat and sugar to measure a balanced intake of calories. Therefore, carefully prepared home cooked meal can increase body metabolism and promote healthy immune system for lifetime. Not only this, eating and making food at home can prove to be very economical in terms of expenses. For instance, eating at a restaurant or canteen at work may seem to be cheap on per day basis, but adding this up can prove to be a burden to an individual's pocket. In this context, one can spend more family time while enjoying the home cooked food. Moreover, eating healthy food at home has its own benefits considering that one can enjoy eating food at the comfort of a house and spend time together as a family after a busy hectic day. To exemplify, some families strictly have a rule that they should be eating at least one meal of the day together so each member can spend time together. Moreover, families who help each other out in preparation of the family meal, learn to support each other and stay connected. In conclusion, I agree with the belief that home cooked food is far better and beneficial to the individual as it promotes healthy as well as economical lifestyle, meanwhile eating at home helps to spend a quality family time.
A section of population believes that preparing
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meal
and consuming at home
is preferred
over
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eating
at
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food
joints outside. I advocate this notion, as I believe that home cooked
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meal
eaten at home brings more health benefits to an individual
rather
than at restaurant or canteens.

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I
these modern
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times
, cooking at home a
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meal
for oneself has numerous long-term health benefits.
In addition
, one can prepare
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healthy
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food
with less
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fat
and sugar to measure a balanced intake of calories.
Therefore
,
carefully
prepared home cooked
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meal
can increase body metabolism and promote
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healthy
immune system for lifetime. Not
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only
this,
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eating
and making
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food
at home can prove to be
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very
economical in terms of expenses.
For instance
,
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eating
at a restaurant or canteen at work may seem to be
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cheap
on per day basis,
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but
adding this up can prove to be a burden to an individual's pocket.

In this context, one can
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spend
more
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family
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time
while enjoying the home cooked
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food
.
Moreover
,
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eating
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healthy
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food
at home has its
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own
benefits considering that one can enjoy
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eating
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food
at the comfort of a
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house
and
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spend
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time
together as a
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family
after a busy hectic day. To exemplify,
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some
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families
strictly
have a
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rule
that they should be
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eating
at least one
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meal
of the day together
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so
each member can
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spend
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time
together.
Moreover
,
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families
who
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help
each other out in preparation of the
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family
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meal
, learn to support each other and stay connected.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
with the belief that home cooked
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food
is far better and beneficial to the individual as it promotes
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healthy
as well
as economical lifestyle, meanwhile
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eating
at home
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helps
to
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spend
a quality
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family
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time
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family thant eating out in restaurants or canteens. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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