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Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants or canteens Do you agree or Disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.4

Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants or canteens v. 4
According to the opinions of most individuals, consuming home-made food is more beneficial than having a meal which is prepared in market outlets. So here I would like to point out some benefits of eating outside, like it saves time of making food, and also a good choice when someone don't know how to cook. And also a variety of cuisines can be tried by having meals outside the retail shops. And also it gives a freshness to the mouth buds, because it gets to taste something different rather than the mundane cooking which tastes same because it is home cooked. So here I will be talking about why it is better to consume home cooked meals, as this way we can be more sure about the quality of the meal and its nutrients as well and also we can customize it to according our way which is hard if we are eating in the market and the meal is being served to public because that way customization can be difficult. And also I would like to give my personal example, I used to be very fragile in terms of my health and the root cause after I diagnosed my daily routine comes out to be consuming meal outside in the market and the moment I stopped having an outside meal, my health becomes better. So here I would conclude that most of the time we should avoid going out for eating, we should only go when it's extremely difficult in the situation and there is no other choice but going out for eating a meal.
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meal
which
is prepared
in market outlets.

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here I would like to point out
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benefits of
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eating
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outside
, like it saves time of making food, and
also
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good
choice when someone
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don't
know how to cook. And
also
a variety of cuisines can
be tried
by having
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meals
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outside
the retail shops. And
also
it gives a freshness to the mouth buds,
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because
it
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gets
to taste something
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different
rather
than the mundane cooking which tastes same
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because
it is home cooked.

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So
here I will be talking about why it is better to consume home cooked
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meals
, as this way we can be more sure about the quality of the
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meal
and its nutrients
as well
and
also
we can customize it to according our way which is
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hard
if we are
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eating
in the market and the
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meal
is
being served
to public
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because
that way customization can be difficult. And
also
I would like to give my personal example, I
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used
to be
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very
fragile in terms of my health and the root cause after I diagnosed my daily routine
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comes
out to be consuming
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meal
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outside
in the market and the moment I
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stopped
having an
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outside
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meal
, my health becomes better.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
here I would conclude that most of the time we should avoid going out for
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eating
, we should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
go when it's
extremely
difficult in the situation and there is no other choice
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but
going out for
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eating
a
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meal
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants or canteens v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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