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Many people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life, whereas others prefer tochange the type of work. Discuss both sides and state your own opinion. v.2

Many people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life, whereas others prefer tochange the type of work. v. 2
The world is changing rapidly. People today face numerous challenges in achieving a meaningful and fulfilling life. That is perhaps why some people change their job many times during their lifetime. However, there are still some who stick to the same job for life. This essay shall look into the benefits of both approaches. There are many reasons why some people like sticking to one job. Firstly, the chances of promotion are much more because of longevity of service. Furthermore, they find greater depth of satisfaction from their working relationships. There is also much better work-life balance if a person’s job is stable and secure. On the other hand, there are some strong benefits that can come from job-hopping. One of the major reasons for changing jobs is a better pay package, which can help to lessen the financial burden of an individual or family. Secondly, the experience that is formed through a change in job can be beneficial in the future. Individuals with a wider range of job experiences and skill sets are seriously considered for new job openings. Moreover, those who have a wide range of careers under their belt also have more job security. If they lose their job, they can seek out jobs in different career fields, as opposed to one career field. What is more, it is generally seen that earlier on in life people settle for whatever job they can get. Job satisfaction at that time is not given any priority. But, later on when the person is a bit comfortable, then changing the job and doing something, which the heart desires is better because it gives more personal fulfillment. By changing jobs a person may finally discover a job, which gives him the maximum job satisfaction. To sum up, it can be said that changing jobs several times during a lifetime, may bring some challenges in life, but overall it is a positive development.
The world is
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changing
rapidly
.
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today
face numerous challenges in achieving
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a


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meaningful
and fulfilling
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life
.
That is
perhaps why
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some
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people
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change
their
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job
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many
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times


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during
their lifetime.
However
, there are
still
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some
who stick to the same
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job
for
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life
. This
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essay


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shall
look into the benefits of both approaches.

There are
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many
reasons why
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some
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people
like sticking to one
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job
.
Firstly
, the chances of

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promotion
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are
much more
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because
of longevity of service.
Furthermore
, they find greater depth

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of
satisfaction from their working relationships. There is
also
much better work-life balance if
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a


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person
’s
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job
is stable and secure.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
strong benefits that can
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come
from job-hopping. One of
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the


major reasons for
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changing
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jobs
is a better pay package, which can
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help
to lessen the financial

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burden
of an individual or family.
Secondly
, the experience that
is formed
through a
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change
in

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job
can be beneficial in the future. Individuals with a wider range of
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job
experiences and
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skill


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sets
are
seriously
considered for new
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job
openings.
Moreover
, those who have a wide range of

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careers
under their belt
also
have more
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job
security. If they lose their
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job
, they can seek out
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jobs


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in
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different
career fields, as opposed to one career field.

What is more
, it is
generally
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seen
that earlier on in
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life
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people
settle for whatever
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job
they can

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get
.
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satisfaction at that time is not
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given
any priority.
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But
, later on when the person is a bit

comfortable, then
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changing
the
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job
and doing something, which the heart desires is better

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because
it gives more personal fulfillment. By
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changing
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jobs
a person may
finally
discover a job,

which gives him the maximum
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job
satisfaction.

To sum up, it can
be said
that
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changing
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jobs
several times during a lifetime, may bring
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some


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challenges
in
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life
,
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but
overall
it is a
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positive
development.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life, whereas others prefer tochange the type of work. v. 2

Essay
  American English
22 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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