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Nowadays more and more people want to live by themselves. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative trend? v.4

Nowadays more and more people want to live by themselves. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative trend? v. 4
Life style and attitude towards life has been changing unconditionally. Without consider others, people inhibit to their own life and oneself that a trend in many individual. However, in this essay explain the cause behind such behaviour such as, single child nuclear family and lack of love and affection which would be a negative inclination as a whole. Initially, most of the family become small and forthcoming generation being in a selfish atmosphere. Earlier, joint family makes up every family members to share and care everything in terms of foods, shelter, dresses, jewels, and so on. Whereas, today' s world has more prominent than before as a job security, financial and living standard, which may lead to people to be self centered and inability to aware about others from childhood. For instance, a survey report from UN established that, children from nuclear and broken family has a tend to be isolated themselves and fail to experience care and share would be a psychological problems like depression and anxiety in many children. Innovative development on to the family settings and life style makes probably wrong outcome on to the individual and society as well. In other words, people who prone to be self centered develops lack of humanity and mankind on others like, poor and illiterates, refugees, and at least grand parents. At once they does not care about others pain, needs and even social problems which would lead to detrimental effect on nation and new generation. The main example of such attitude is that increasing number of old age homes in many part of the world that is, children could not find time to take care of their parents instead of own family like husband, wife and one or two children. To sum up, being selfish and live for themselves is a ingenious trend in globally by the inefficient co ordination or foundation of family and there by produce a pernicious effect on future of every individual and society.
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style and attitude towards
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life
has been changing
unconditionally
. Without consider others,
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people
inhibit to their
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own
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life
and oneself that a trend in
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many
individual.
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, in this essay
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explain
the cause behind such
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behaviour
such as, single child nuclear
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family
and lack of
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love
and affection which would be a
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negative
inclination as a whole.

Initially
, most of the
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family
become
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small
and forthcoming generation being in a selfish atmosphere. Earlier, joint
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family
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makes
up every
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family
members to share and
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care
everything in terms of foods, shelter, dresses, jewels, and
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so
on. Whereas,
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today&
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before
as a job security, financial and living standard, which may lead to
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people
to be self centered and inability to aware about others from childhood.
For instance
, a survey report from UN established that, children from nuclear and broken
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family
has
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a tend
to
be isolated
themselves and fail to experience
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care
and share would be a psychological
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problems
like depression and anxiety in
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many
children.

Innovative development on to the
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family
settings and
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life
style
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makes
probably
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wrong
outcome on to the individual and society
as well
. In
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other
words,
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people
who prone to be self centered develops lack of humanity and mankind on others like, poor and illiterates, refugees, and at least grand parents. At
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once they
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does
not
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care
about others pain, needs and even social problems which would lead to detrimental effect on nation and new generation. The main example of such attitude is that increasing number of
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old
age homes in
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many part
of the world
that is
, children could not find time to take
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care
of their parents
instead
of
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own
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family
like husband, wife and one or two children.

To sum up, being selfish and
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live
for themselves is
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a
ingenious trend in globally by the inefficient
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co ordination
or foundation of
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family
and there by produce a pernicious effect on future of every individual and society.
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IELTS essay Nowadays more and more people want to live by themselves. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative trend? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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