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Some people are making new friends by using socializing network websites and internetchat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people say that peopleshould make new friends by face-to-face chat. Discuss these views and give your ownopin v.1

Some people are making new friends by using socializing network websites and internetchat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people say that peopleshould make new friends by face-to-face chat. Discuss these views and give your ownopin v. 1
Some individuals are of the opinion that it is good to make friends online on various social networking sites and internet chat rooms. However, others are in favour of making friends by direct face to face chat. This essay intends to look at both perspectives. I personally side with the latter view. On the one hand, social network sites like ‘Facebook’ provide a great opportunity for people to socialize with one another and find common ground, before even meeting. Online social groups have become fundamental building blocks of modern human societies. They have a beneficial effect on our way of life. They increase our social interaction and give us more ways to make social connections. Earlier our social interactions were constrained by national boundaries, but now the Internet has turned communication into a global phenomenon. Today, our network of friends stretches across the globe. On the other hand, making friends through direct contact is definitely better as social media sites can cause more harm than good. People can make fake IDs and cheat anyone. Every now and then we hear stories how girls and boys were cheated through such sites and after months of friendship, the original identity of the person turned out to be very different. Cyber criminals can hack the IDs of people and chat on their behalf which may cause huge misunderstandings. Furthermore, face to face friendship is better because it is a friendship which has a deeper bond than online friendship. Man is after all a social animal and friends are meant to be there when you need them the most. Online friends cannot be with you when you are sick and you need a friend’s touch. Face to face friends are with you in thick and thin and this can never be possible with online friends. To sum up, even though the growing majority of the world’s population abides by the social meme: “I love my computer, because my friends live in it”, I still reiterate my opinion that face to face friendships are stronger and longer-lasting.
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friends
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online
on various

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social
networking
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sites
and internet chat rooms.
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, others are in
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making
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friends
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face
to
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face
chat. This essay intends to look at
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both


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perspectives
. I
personally
side with the latter view.

On the one hand,
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social
network
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sites
like ‘Facebook’ provide a great opportunity for

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people
to socialize with one another and find common ground,
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before
even meeting.

Online
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social
groups have become fundamental building blocks of modern human

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societies
. They have a beneficial effect on our way of life. They increase our
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social


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interaction
and give us more ways to
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make
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social
connections. Earlier our
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social


interactions
were constrained
by national boundaries,
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but
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now
the Internet has turned

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communication
into a global phenomenon.
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Today
, our network of
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friends
stretches

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across
the globe.

On the other hand
, making
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friends
through direct contact is definitely better as social

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media
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sites
can cause more harm than
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good
.
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People
can
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make
fake IDs and
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cheat


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anyone
. Every
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now
and then we hear stories how girls and boys
were cheated
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through


such
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sites
and after months of
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friendship
, the original identity of the person turned out to

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be
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very
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different
. Cyber criminals can hack the IDs of
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people
and chat on their
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behalf


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which
may cause huge misunderstandings.

Furthermore
,
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face
to
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face
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friendship
is better
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because
it is a
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friendship
which has a

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deeper
bond than
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online
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friendship
.
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Man
is
after all
a
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social
animal and
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friends
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are


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meant
to be there when you need them the most.
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Online
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friends
cannot be with
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you


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when
you are sick and you need a
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friend’s
touch.
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Face
to
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face
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friends
are with you
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in


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thick
and thin and this can never be possible with
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online
friends.

To sum up,
even though
the growing majority of the world’s population abides by the

social meme: “I
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love
my computer,
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because
my
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friends
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live
in it”, I
still
reiterate my

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opinion
that
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face
to
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face
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friendships
are stronger and longer-lasting.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people are making new friends by using socializing network websites and internetchat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people say that peopleshould make new friends by face-to-face chat. Discuss these views and give your ownopin v. 1

Essay
  American English
26 paragraphs
342 words
5.5
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