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Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education. Why do people do this? Would you consider doing this yourself and why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience v.2

Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education. Why do people do this? Would you consider doing this yourself and why? 2
Studying in an abroad country has become fashion now. With each passing day there is augment in the people going foreign for higher studies. This essay will discuss why people choose to go abroad and provide evidence if I get a chance what are the reasons I will be going out the country for studies. To start with, studying in an international country has numerous benefits as it leads to a better prospective and career development. For instance, in foreign countries, people get hand to hand training which makes them experienced even before they graduate from university which ultimately leads to better job after graduating. Not this but also having a foreign degree opened various path for the students even after they go back to their respective countries they can easily get high rated jobs or even can do their own business. Therefore, people travel a long way for the studying as this study benefit them in the long run for their future career. Another advantage we share values and learn others culture and heritage and sometime even a new language. For example, at foreign universities there are people from all over the world which makes us learn their respective culture and language. Not this, but also it makes the person independent and they learn how to manage their own things and balance their life. Thus, it is good for overall development of one's personality. At last, if I get a chance to go to my high education I will definitely go as I want to do mu business in future. To conclude, though it's not easy to live alone, but for a better future and learn new things and to become independent one must never miss the opportunity for going abroad for studying.
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for higher studies. This essay will discuss why
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people
choose to go abroad and provide evidence if I
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get
a chance what are the reasons I will be going out the
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for studies.

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with,
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studying
in an international
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has numerous benefits as it leads to a better prospective and career development.
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, in
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foreign
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countries
,
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people
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training which
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them experienced even
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they graduate from university which
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leads to better job after graduating. Not this
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also
having a
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degree opened various path for the students even after they go back to their respective
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countries
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easily
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get
high rated jobs or even can do their
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travel a long way for the
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as this study benefit them in the long run for their future career.

Another advantage we share values and
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learn
others culture and heritage and sometime even a new language.
For example
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foreign
universities there are
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people
from all over the world which
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makes
us
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learn
their respective culture and language. Not this,
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but
also
it
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makes
the person
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learn
how to manage their
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things and balance their life.
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good
for
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development of one's personality. At last, if I
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get
a chance to go to my high education I will definitely go as I want to do mu business
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To conclude
, though it's not easy to
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live
alone,
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for a better future and
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must
never miss the opportunity for going abroad for
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studying
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10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education. Why do people do this? Would you consider doing this yourself and why? 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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