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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. v.23

As a rule, the young people are instructed to go out with someone supervision after a certain time in the night at the time of the curfew in some specific areas of the USA. To my way of Thinking, it is a justifiable strategy for the safety of the young generation and to control the number of crimes currently and in the future too. Firstly, youngsters are immature; they do not have real-life experience as well as they do not make difference between good and bad things. For instance, if they will go out alone they can engage in any criminal activities such as drug addiction or selling. Secondly, they can be abducted by the satanic people to sell them for dark websites or any other awful activities. On the other hand, If the children remain at home especially at the night they would not encounter any adverse event which can be harmful to their life and future too. Moreover, the young generation is strictly advised to go-out under supervision by someone adult which could be from their family member to make them secure because supervision will confine them if they are going to attract toward or stuck in any unwanted events. In conclusion, the Government of America has a focus point of safety for their children in high-risk places especially in late hours or in unavoidable situations family must be with them. I strongly in favor of this methodology because our youth will make our future of the country if they will remain safe our future will be healthier.
As a
rule
, the young
people
are instructed
to go out with someone supervision after a certain time in the night at the time of the curfew in
some
specific areas of the USA. To my way of Thinking, it is a justifiable strategy for the safety of the young generation and to control the number of crimes
currently
and in the
future
too.
Firstly
, youngsters are immature; they do not have real-life experience
as well
as they do not
make
difference between
good
and
bad
things.
For instance
, if they will go out alone they can engage in any criminal activities such as drug addiction or selling.
Secondly
, they can
be abducted
by the satanic
people
to sell them for dark websites or any other awful activities.
On the other hand
, If the children remain at home
especially
at the night they would not encounter any adverse
event
which can be harmful to their life and
future
too.
Moreover
, the young generation is
strictly
advised to go-out under supervision by someone adult which could be from their family member to
make
them secure
because
supervision will confine them if they are going to attract toward or stuck in any unwanted
events
.
In conclusion
, the
Government
of America has a focus point of safety for their children in high-
risk
places
especially
in late hours or in unavoidable
situations
family
must
be with them. I
strongly
in favor of this methodology
because
our youth will
make
our
future
of the country if they will remain safe our
future
will be healthier.
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IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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  American English
1 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
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