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Many people like to wear fashionable cloths. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or bad thing? v.1

Many people like to wear fashionable cloths. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or bad thing? v. 1
Clothing has always been an essential part of many people lifestyle. In the 21st century, most of people are passionate about wear different style outfits specifically youngsters and adults spend more money on buying apparels, footwear. The essay will narrate the reasons of this trend and positive effects on the society. It has been believed that wearing fashionable outfits make people more representable and attractive. In the modern era, clothing plays paramount role in displaying person image in term of dignity and respect. The well dressed individual receives praise and also considered as a well-mannered. To illustrate, in many outlets, a customer wearing stylish clothes gets more attention than the other buys from the shopkeeper. Therefore, it has become inevitable part of human life that a person wearing fashionable is given more preference. The first and foremost reason is the impact of social media, which influence people to follow the latest trend. Besides, youngsters and adults more aggressively chase the fashion. Secondly, many people consider that fashionable outfit makes them more confident and expressive. For instance, in sales and operation department of an organization, employees are well dressed as they have to interact with their clients. Therefore, they believe cloths are of paramount importance to have a good impression. To conclude, in my opinion individual should wear clothes on basis of occasions as wearing fashionable attire can go wrong at certain events. Even though it has both positive and negative effects on the individual and society, however if anyone is offended by certain clothing than a person wearing stylish attire should be responsible. People should choose clothes according to the place and society.
Clothing has always been an essential part of
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many
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people
lifestyle. In the 21st century, most of
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people
are passionate about wear
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different
style outfits
specifically
youngsters and adults spend more money on buying apparels, footwear. The essay will narrate the reasons of this trend and
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positive
effects on the society.

It has
been believed
that wearing
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fashionable
outfits
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make
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people
more representable and attractive. In the modern era, clothing plays paramount role in displaying person image in term of dignity and respect. The
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well dressed
individual receives praise and
also
considered as
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a well-mannered
. To illustrate, in
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many
outlets, a customer wearing stylish
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clothes
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gets
more attention than the other
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buys
from the shopkeeper.
Therefore
, it has become inevitable part of human life that a person wearing
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fashionable
is
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given
more preference.

The
first
and foremost reason is the impact of social media, which influence
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people
to follow the latest trend.
Besides
, youngsters and adults more
aggressively
chase the fashion.
Secondly
,
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many
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people
consider that
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fashionable
outfit
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makes
them more confident and expressive.
For instance
, in sales and operation department of an organization, employees are
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well dressed
as they
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have to
interact with their clients.
Therefore
, they believe
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cloths
are of paramount importance to have a
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good
impression.

To conclude
, in my opinion individual should wear
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clothes
on basis of occasions as wearing
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fashionable
attire can go
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wrong
at certain
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events
.
Even though
it has both
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positive
and
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negative
effects on the individual and society,
however
if anyone
is offended
by certain clothing than a person wearing stylish attire should be responsible.
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People
should choose
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clothes
according to the place and society.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people like to wear fashionable cloths. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or bad thing? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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