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Many people join distance‐learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Many people join distance‐learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. v. 1
These days Distance learning has become widely popular, especially after the invention of the internet. It is undeniable fact that the distance learning mode is very useful, especially for those living in remote areas, for those who are physically challenged and for those who want to do a job while studying. However, there are many advantages of actually attending a University. Let us see how going to a University score over the distance-mode To begin by going to a University provides the opportunity of face-to-face interaction with the teachers. This is extremely helpful for gaining a quick grasp of a subject, especially if it is being approached for the first time. The student not only masters the contents of the prescribed lessons, but also gains a deeper insight into the subject as the teacher elucidates from his own experiences. If there are any doubts in the mind of the student, the teacher can readily offer the necessary clarifications. If he has not been able to fully comprehend any particular aspect of the lesson, he can request that it be explained to him again. Students can also help each other through the exchange of ideas and information, after the class hours. For Example Studying and working together in a group also increases the level of inspiration and the quest for achievement. Another reason I agree is because, instructors have extensive experience in dealing with students from different backgrounds and modify their lessons according to the capacity of the students This is completely missing in the distance learning method and thus the single-package-fits-all model is less productive. Let's Take online guitar learners as an example a recent study made by the University of Oxford reveals that nine out of ten learners fail to master it due to the lack of motivation To conclude, I believe that students should be taught at universities and we attend educational institutes to learn and become enlightened citizens.
These days Distance learning has become
widely
popular,
especially
after the invention of the internet. It is undeniable fact that the distance learning mode is
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very
useful,
especially
for those living in remote areas, for those who are
physically
challenged and for those who want to do a job while studying.
However
, there are
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many
advantages of actually attending a
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University
.
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Let
us
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see
how going to a
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University
score over the
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distance-mode


To
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begin
by going to a
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University
provides the opportunity of face-to-face interaction with the teachers. This is
extremely
helpful for gaining a quick grasp of a subject,
especially
if it is
being approached
for the
first
time. The
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student
not
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only
masters the contents of the prescribed lessons,
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but
also
gains a deeper insight into the subject as the teacher elucidates from his
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own
experiences. If there are any doubts in the mind of the
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student
, the teacher can
readily
offer the necessary clarifications. If he has not been able to
fully
comprehend any particular aspect of the lesson, he can request that it be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
to him again.
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Students
can
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
each other through the exchange of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and information, after the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
hours.
For Example
Studying and working together in a group
also
increases the level of inspiration and the quest for achievement.

Another reason I
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agree
is
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because
, instructors have extensive experience in dealing with
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students
from
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different
backgrounds and modify their lessons according to the capacity of the
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students
This is completely missing in the distance learning method and
thus
the single-package-fits-all model is less productive.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
's Take online guitar learners as an example a recent study made by the
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University
of Oxford reveals that nine out of ten learners fail to master it due to the lack of motivation

To conclude
, I believe that
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students
should
be taught
at
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
universities and
we attend educational institutes to learn and become enlightened citizens.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people join distance‐learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
321 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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