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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v.3

Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v. 3
Eating and drinking healthy is a paramount to ensure a good body, while many people are having a hard time to ensure a healthy diet. Having a bad work-life balance, being unaware of healthy foods, and temptation for junk food are some underlying root causes that make it difficult to maintain a healthy diet. Hence, this essay will discuss these underlying reasons, and provide plausible solutions to mitigate it. Nowadays people have very little work-life balance, which is the main reason why they can not eat and drink in a healthy manner. As a result, a vast majority of them resort to junk foods and fizzy drinks which are available and cheap, which eventually makes their life unhealthy. Moreover, many city dewlers are so busy that they are unaware of the horrible outcomes of unhealthy food habit. Many research has shown that bad work-life balance, unawareness and too much consumption of junk foods are leading us toward numerous fatal diseases such as obesity, heart diseases, diabetes so on and so forth. Overall, these are the key factors behind living an unhealthy life with an improper diet. However, every problem has its own solution. In this case, to solve the bad diet issue, people need to maintain and ensure a good work-life balance in the first place. They need to master and strike a balance between their work and personal life, otherwise, too much work load will not let them to eat and drink healthy. Furthermore, they need to be aware of how to make a perfectly balanced diet chart as per food value, and abandon junk foods forever. They may also pay visit to a doctor and ask for a customized diet chart outlined according to their body structure, which they can follow to remain healthy. In summary, it is obvious that due to the hectic and complex lifestyle, it is getting tougher to maintain a healthy balanced diet. But if people can cast away the craving for junk food, make a good work-life balance, exercise more and create a diet chart, they can eventually ensure a healthy diet.
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diet. Having a
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work-life
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balance
, being unaware of
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healthy
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foods
, and temptation for
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junk
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food
are
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some
underlying root causes that
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it difficult to maintain a
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healthy
diet.
Hence
, this essay will discuss these underlying reasons, and provide plausible solutions to mitigate it.

Nowadays
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people
have
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work-life
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balance
, which is the main reason why they can not eat and drink in a
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healthy
manner.
As a result
, a vast majority of them resort to
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junk
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foods
and fizzy drinks which are available and
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cheap
, which
eventually
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makes
their life unhealthy.
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city
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busy that they are unaware of the horrible outcomes of unhealthy
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has shown that
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, unawareness and too much consumption of
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junk
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foods
are leading us toward numerous fatal diseases such as obesity, heart diseases, diabetes
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on and
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Overall
, these are the key factors behind living an unhealthy life with an improper diet.

However
, every problem has its
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own
solution.
In this case
, to solve the
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bad
diet issue,
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people
need to maintain and
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between their work and personal life,
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, too much work load will not
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let
them to eat and drink
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healthy
.
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, they need to be aware of how to
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a
perfectly
balanced diet chart as per
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value, and abandon
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junk
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foods
forever. They may
also
pay visit to a doctor and
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a customized diet chart outlined according to their body structure, which they can follow to remain healthy.

In summary, it is obvious that due to the hectic and complex lifestyle, it is getting tougher to maintain a
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healthy
balanced diet.
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if
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people
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junk
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food
,
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, exercise more and create a diet chart, they can
eventually
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a
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healthy
diet.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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