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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v.1

Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v. 1
Eating healthy is one of the biggest problems for some people. This is due to the lack of time to prepare a healthy meal and the increasing number of fast food available. This essay will discuss in depth the causes and propose a solution to this problem. Nowadays people are spending more time at work and it has been difficult for them to find time to prepare their own meals. As a result, they end up buying frozen meals that is high in fat and there are fewer nutrients that directly affect their diet. A recent research in the UK shows that people are buying 60% more frozen food compared to 10 years ago. In addition, the increasing number of fast food chains is attracting more people to consume unhealthy food. Because of the facility to stop at drive-throughs, many people decide to buy their meals in their way home. For instance, in Australia all the Mac Donald’s are open 24 hours, this is due to the high demand of people buying food late in the day. On the other hand, people preparing their meals on the weekends could easily solve this problem. The majority of people have at least a day off; this day can be used to prepare meals for the week so people would not have to worry about what they are going to eat the next day. For instance, I have a day off on Sundays and I make my meals for 7 days, this saves me time and makes me have a balanced diet. In conclusion, the two main difficulties to have a balanced diet are lack of time and the facilities of having fast food available all the time. However, this problem can be solved using one day of the week to prepare healthy meals and this will result in a healthy diet.
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is one of the biggest problems for
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. This is due to the lack of
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time
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prepare
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healthy
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meal
and the increasing number of
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fast
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food
available. This essay will discuss in depth the causes and propose a solution to this problem.

Nowadays
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people
are spending more
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time
at work and it has been difficult for them to find
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time
to
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prepare
their
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own
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meals
.
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, they
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end
up buying frozen
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meals
that is
high in
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fat
and there are fewer nutrients that
directly
affect their diet. A recent research in the UK
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shows
that
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people
are buying 60% more frozen
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food
compared to 10 years ago.
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, the increasing number of
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fast
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chains is attracting more
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people
to consume unhealthy
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food
.
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in their way home.
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buying
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late in the day.

On the other hand
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people
preparing their
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meals
on the weekends could
easily
solve this problem. The majority of
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people
have at least a day off; this day can be
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to
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for the week
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would not
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worry about what they are going to eat the
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for 7 days, this saves me
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time
and
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me have a balanced diet.

In conclusion
, the two main difficulties to have a balanced diet are lack of
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time
and the facilities of having
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fast
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food
available all the
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.
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using one day of the week to
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prepare
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healthy
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meals
and this will result in a
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healthy
diet.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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