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Many people have a close relationship with their pets These people treat their birds cats or other animals like members of their family In your opinion are such relationships good Why or why not Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v.2

Many people have a close relationship with their pets These people treat their birds cats or other animals like members of their family In your opinion are such relationships good Why or why not Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v. 2
Humans and animals have maintained a healthy relationship since the evolution of mankind. Primitives used to keep dogs hunt food and to secure their homes. Nowadays, the people who keep pets have a close bonding with them. They treat animals such as dogs, cats in the same way as their children. In my opinion, this relationship is good. First of all, by keeping animals like birds, cats, dogs or cows increases their age. As if these animals stray on streets they are more susceptible to be pounced upon by predators. For instance, cats can be jumped upon by dogs or parrots could be hunted by ferocious birds like eagles or vultures. Secondly, herbivores like goats, cows provides daily requirement of human beings such as milk and other dairy related products. In turn, humans take care of these domesticated animals species and provide them optimum nutrients and fodder to keep them healthy. Thus maintaining a mutual relationship. On the other hand, this relationship is not viable because it takes away the freedom from pets to roam freely. In their natural habitat they can play with other animals of their kind. Often, it heard that people tie dogs for hours and sometimes punish them for fun. Recently, a footage has featured on news channel where a man is seen throwing a small puppy from top of the building. This kind of acts makes one think whether it is reasonable to keep animals at residence. Considering above points one could say that these mutual relationships are good for both humans and animals. But some degree of freedom should also be allowed to domesticated pets as well.
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and
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animals
have maintained a healthy
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relationship
since the evolution of mankind. Primitives
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used
to
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keep
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dogs
hunt food and to secure their homes. Nowadays, the
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people
who
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keep
pets have a close bonding with them. They treat
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animals
such as
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dogs
, cats
in the same way
as their children. In my opinion, this
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relationship
is
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good
.

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First of all
, by keeping
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animals
like birds, cats,
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dogs
or cows increases their age.
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As
if these
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animals
stray on streets they are more susceptible to
be pounced
upon by predators.
For instance
, cats can
be jumped
upon by
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dogs
or parrots could
be hunted
by ferocious birds like eagles or vultures.

Secondly
, herbivores like goats, cows provides daily requirement of
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human
beings such as milk and other dairy related products. In turn,
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humans
take care of these domesticated
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animals
species and provide them optimum nutrients and fodder to
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keep
them healthy.
Thus
maintaining a mutual relationship.

On the other hand
, this
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relationship
is not viable
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because
it takes away the freedom from pets to roam
freely
. In their natural habitat they can play with other
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animals
of their kind.
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Often
, it heard that
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people
tie
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dogs
for hours and
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sometimes
punish them for fun. Recently, a footage has featured on news channel where a
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man
is
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seen
throwing a
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small
puppy from top of the building. This kind of acts
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makes
one
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think
whether it is reasonable to
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keep
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animals
at residence.

Considering above points one could say that these mutual
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relationships
are
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good
for both
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humans
and
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animals
.
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But
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some
degree of freedom should
also
be
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allowed
to domesticated pets
as well
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people have a close relationship with their pets These people treat their birds cats or other animals like members of their family In your opinion are such relationships good Why or why not Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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