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Many people have a close relationship with their pets These people treat their birds cats or other animals like members of their family In your opinion are such relationships good Why or why not Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v.1

Many people have a close relationship with their pets These people treat their birds cats or other animals like members of their family In your opinion are such relationships good Why or why not Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v. 1
The things that happened in the past played a pivotal role in human life. Many modern architectural and medicinal values are derived from that. Though, some people think that learning history will waste their time and money, many modern architectural and medicinal values are derived from them. To understand it, proper scrutinize of the value of history is needed. To begin with, undoubtedly, past events played a significant role in the modern era by its contribution towards art, literature and medicinal arenas. Moreover, its involvement in the betterment of human life is huge, such as the development of present day monuments and vaccines in medical fields. The monuments helped in the preservation of cultural identity and the human's evolution in their lifestyle and living habitats, for an example, Tajmahal is the one among the others still standing and showing the beautiful love story of the great ruler and other examples are, the development of vaccines by analyzing past activity of viral deaths, the countries freedom moments to know patriotic fighters and their contributions, evolution of human life to understand how the human body parts work. However, learning history in school will push some people to question the purpose of this in their life. It is appropriate to think like that, because some people enjoy mathematics or other subjects and they wish to spend time on that rather than studying history. Furthermore, spending time in history that will not help in the future will make the majority of the people to believe that learning them hold no value. Despite of this, some people want to learn past events to work on their passions such as archaeology, arts among other examples. In a nutshell, I believe learning history is a waste of time when a person pursuing a career option that is apart from that. While studying in school everyone thought to become a person who works on something, but they are confused due to learning numerous subjects and this will deviate from their goal. So learning subjects that help to improve life in a better way rather than spending time in history or other subjects. It will make people depressed and it distracts them from the things that they actually want.
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is huge, such as the development of present day monuments and vaccines in medical fields. The monuments
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examples are, the development of vaccines by analyzing
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activity of viral deaths, the countries freedom moments to know patriotic fighters and their contributions, evolution of
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to understand how the
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body parts work.

However
,
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history
in school will push
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people
to question the purpose of this in their
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. It is appropriate to
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subjects and
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is a waste of
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when a person pursuing a career option
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in
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depressed and it distracts them from the things that they actually want.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people have a close relationship with their pets These people treat their birds cats or other animals like members of their family In your opinion are such relationships good Why or why not Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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