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Many people feel that urban environments and more unhealthy than they have ever been What do you think are the main causes of this problem What measures can be effective in tackling this problem v.1

Many people feel that urban environments and more unhealthy than they have ever been What do you think are the main causes of this problem What measures can be effective in tackling this problem v. 1
Some people believe, that living in the city is now becoming more and more unhealthy. Personally, I want to highlight a few ecological, mental causes and suggestions how to improve this situation. At the beginning, I should mention, that not only various pollutions influence on the health of population, but also mental criteria in general in towns is particularly important. The most common issue in urban environments are vehicle emissions. While enormous amounts of cars are widely used for everyday life, staking in traffic jams, exhausts are polluting our cities. Breathing with this emissions is very dangerous, and even in mega cities, suchlike Tokyo, Seoul, a big part of the population wear special masks. Second, but not less important cause is more on person' s mental health than on ordinary physical - overpopulation. many people agree, that they no longer do not feel comfortable in their places of living. For example, like many others I feel disgusting, while staying at crowded places and even feel scared. In my opinion, to solve the first problem, one of the suggestions could be to go for bikes. Of course, many people would not agree with this offer. But by using bikes, we will cut the amounts of vehicle' s exhausts, traffic and frequent accidents. There are already a lot of towns, like Amsterdam, where we can see positive changes. On the other hand, solutions for overpopulation are still don' t look particularly humanely. Simple promotes family planning and the establishment od one-child policy should be looked at the first place. To give an example, China has reduced the problem of overpopulation at few per cents, by encouraging families to have only one child, providing different additional taxis and fees for those, who have 2 and more children. In summary, there are always some solutions for everything, but we should all think about them, not only a part of the society. I absolutely agree with this causes and measures and believe, that the best saying here is " If you are not a part of the solution, you are part of the problem" . That is why I am trying to not use lots of methods of transport and simply go on my foot and take part in many projects, th may help our city to be a little bit more environment friendly.
Some
people
believe, that living in the city is
now
becoming more and more unhealthy.
Personally
, I want to highlight a few ecological, mental causes and suggestions how to
improve
this situation.

At the beginning, I should mention, that not
only
various pollutions influence on the health of population,
but
also
mental criteria
in general in
towns is
particularly
important
. The most common issue in urban environments are vehicle emissions. While enormous amounts of cars are
widely
used
for everyday life, staking in traffic jams, exhausts are polluting our
cities
. Breathing with
this
emissions is
very
dangerous
, and even in mega
cities
, suchlike Tokyo, Seoul, a
big
part
of the population wear special masks. Second,
but
not less
important
cause is more on
person&
#039; s mental health than on ordinary physical
-
overpopulation.
many
people
agree
, that they no longer do not feel comfortable in their places of living.
For example
, like
many
others I feel disgusting, while staying at crowded places and even feel scared.

In my opinion, to solve the
first
problem, one of the suggestions could be to go for bikes.
Of course
,
many
people
would not
agree
with this offer.
But
by using bikes, we will
cut
the amounts of
vehicle&
#039; s exhausts, traffic and frequent accidents. There are already
a lot of
towns, like Amsterdam, where we can
see
positive
changes
.

On the other hand
, solutions for overpopulation are
still
don&
#039; t look
particularly
humanely
. Simple promotes family planning and the establishment
od
one-child policy should
be looked
at the
first
place. To give an example, China has
reduced
the problem of overpopulation at few per cents, by encouraging families to have
only
one child, providing
different
additional taxis and fees for those, who have 2 and more children.

In summary, there are always
some
solutions for everything,
but
we should all
think
about them, not
only
a
part
of the society. I
absolutely
agree
with
this
causes and measures and believe, that the best saying here is
&quot
; If you are not a
part
of the solution, you are
part
of the
problem&quot
;
.
That is
why I am trying to not
use
lots of methods of transport and
simply
go on my foot and take
part
in
many
projects,
th
may
help
our city to be a
little bit
more environment friendly.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people feel that urban environments and more unhealthy than they have ever been What do you think are the main causes of this problem What measures can be effective in tackling this problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
389 words
5.5
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