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3) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.2

3) It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2
I disagreed that its more important for students to study history and leterature than its for them study science and mathmatics. Science, history, mathmatics, literature, of all them are very important and we should be good in all of them but i think science and mathematics are more important for two reasons: First the science and mathematics are so important for the modern life, by science we can build we can study human health we can know the life cycle of the human, animals, planets. If we study history and we left the science so how we can deal with the life, how we can imagine the human being without science as well as for the mathmatics if we didnt focus on mathmatics in the classes how the students will sum the numbers how they will multiply large numbers to solve the equation. the engineering, counter, and many field need to learn much about mathmatics. Secondly if we are focusing on history and we will be very good in history and then what is the new how we can make a high building, how we can do a perfect machine of airplane for example when we are compare the old airplanes with the ancient one we will see alot of diffrence, with increasing of quality of construction because we focus to improve the science with th mathmatics. So in my opinion the students should learn history and focus more on science and mathmatics wich are improve our life from good to best one
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human health we can know the
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IELTS essay 3) It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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