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Many people believe that its better to learn something in a group rather than individually. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Many people believe that its better to learn something in a group rather than individually. v. 6
Some people often argue that group study is more effective than studying alone for better understanding. I strongly agree with this statement because learning in a group promotes sharing of ideas and long term memory. However, an individual cannot focus completely on his work. First of all, group study is considered to be one of the most fruitful method of learning, as this type of study involves a number of people and they interact among themselves, sharing different views and opinions about a certain topic. For example: In a class a group of 5 students were given an assignment while other students were told to do the same work alone. In a comparison, group work was proved to have best performance rather than individual work, this was because pupils generated new ideas and viewpoints, learned from each other. Therefore, learning in a grouo is far more effective than studying individually. Secondly, group work directly helps for a long term memory. In many countries, schools and universities have started asystem of grouo study. When learners work in a mass they tend to gain knowledge practically and this leads to the memorization for a longer period of time. This type of study method may also involve demonstration, simulation and many other audio and visual aids that promoted the learning capabilities. However, on the other hand, this type of learning system can cayse disturbances and conflict of ideas. The viewpoints of different people maynot match in sameway and this will create confusion. learners mightnot focus completely on their work or study. Likewise, one uncooperative member in a group can also affect the learning environment of others. In conclusion, group study helps in generation of new ideas and sharing of different opinions that helps in memorization of materials for a longer period of time but can affect an individually in concentrating or being attentive towards their work.
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argue that
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is more effective than studying alone for better understanding. I
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agree
with this statement
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because
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learning
in a
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promotes sharing of
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ideas
and long term memory.
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, an individual cannot focus completely on his work.

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First of all
,
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group
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is considered
to be one of the most fruitful method of
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learning
, as this type of
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study
involves a number of
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people and
they interact among themselves, sharing
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different
views and opinions about a certain topic.
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: In a
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class
a
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group
of 5 students were
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given
an assignment while
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other
students were
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told
to do the same
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work
alone. In a comparison,
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group
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work
was proved
to
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have best
performance
rather
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, this was
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pupils generated new
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ideas
and viewpoints, learned from each
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other
.
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,
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learning
in a
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grouo
is far more effective than studying
individually
.

Secondly
,
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work
directly
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helps
for a long term memory. In
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countries, schools and universities have
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of
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grouo
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study
. When learners
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work
in a mass they tend to gain knowledge
practically
and this leads to the memorization for a longer period of time. This type of
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study
method may
also
involve demonstration, simulation and
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many
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other
audio and visual aids that promoted the
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learning
capabilities.

However
, on the
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other
hand, this type of
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learning
system can
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cayse
disturbances and conflict of
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ideas
. The viewpoints of
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people
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match in
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learners
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mightnot
focus completely on their
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work
or
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.
Likewise
, one uncooperative member in a
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group
can
also
affect the
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learning
environment of others.

In conclusion
,
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group
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study
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helps
in generation of new
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ideas
and sharing of
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different
opinions that
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helps
in memorization of materials for a longer period of time
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but
can affect an
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individually in
concentrating or being attentive towards their
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work
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that its better to learn something in a group rather than individually. v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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