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Topic: Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Topic: Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. v. 2
Some people believe that starvation and poverty could only be addressed by the economic progress, while others contend that allowing the progress of economy will inevitably affect the environment in a damaging way and so it must be stopped. In my opinion, the welfare of our own humankind is of vital importance and we cannot afford it without damaging the environment. Therefore, the sustainable development concept is preferable to any state’s economic policy. Economic growth has always been the most sensible way to go for ending hunger and poverty all over the world. By spurring the economic progress, more jobs are created to feed such development. People, in turn, joining the workforce where they contribute actively and get paid to afford food and other necessities. As seen in most industrialized nations, the numbers of people living under the poverty line are far fewer than those in the underdeveloped ones such as Asian and much of Africa. Statistically, economic growth index is directly proportional to the poverty rate and there is no other way of addressing the problem in question in the absence of economic development. On the other hand, there is incontrovertible evidence that human is the major contributor to environmental destruction. To serve the purpose of boosting the economy, we have heavily exploited natural resources for farmlands, accommodation, and industrial material input. This leads to global warming expected to cause climate catastrophe that ultimately causes a heavy toll for human beings in the foreseeable future. Developing the economy in a sustainable way will effectively deal with the two above problems. Nations should be forced to adopt a policy in which economic progress is coupled with sustainable resources’ exploitation as well as the widespread deployment of environmental improvement such as binding emissions targets. Only when such policy is effectively enforced at a global level, humans are able to avoid suffering and dying either from hunger or climate disasters. In conclusion, humans could alleviate serious repercussions to the environment by forcing every country on the globe to adopt sustainable economic development along with many other environmental protection policies. In any case, human survival and prosperity should be our first priority and environmental destruction is an inevitable sacrifice to achieve such aim as was in the past.
Some
people
believe that starvation and
poverty
could
only
be addressed
by the
economic
progress
, while others contend that allowing the
progress
of economy will
inevitably
affect the environment
in a damaging way
and
so
it
must
be
stopped
. In my opinion, the welfare of our
own
humankind is of vital
importance and
we cannot afford it without damaging the environment.
Therefore
, the
sustainable
development concept is preferable to any state’s
economic
policy.

Economic growth has always been the most sensible way to go for ending hunger and
poverty
all over the world. By spurring the
economic
progress
, more jobs
are created
to feed such development.
People
, in turn, joining the workforce where they contribute
actively
and
get
paid to afford food and
other
necessities. As
seen
in most industrialized nations, the numbers of
people
living under the
poverty
line are far fewer than those in the underdeveloped ones such as Asian and much of Africa.
Statistically
,
economic
growth index is
directly
proportional to the
poverty
rate and there is no
other
way of addressing the problem in question in the absence of
economic
development.

On the
other
hand, there is incontrovertible evidence that
human
is the major contributor to
environmental
destruction. To serve the purpose of boosting the economy, we have
heavily
exploited natural resources for farmlands, accommodation, and industrial material input. This leads to global warming
expected
to cause climate catastrophe that
ultimately
causes a heavy toll for
human
beings in the foreseeable future. Developing the economy in a
sustainable
way will
effectively
deal with the two above problems. Nations should
be forced
to adopt a policy in which
economic
progress
is coupled
with
sustainable
resources’ exploitation
as well
as the widespread deployment of
environmental
improvement such as binding emissions targets.
Only
when such policy is
effectively
enforced at a global level,
humans
are able to avoid suffering and dying either from hunger or climate disasters.

In conclusion
,
humans
could alleviate serious repercussions to the environment by forcing every country on the globe to adopt
sustainable
economic
development along with
many
other
environmental
protection policies. In any case,
human
survival and prosperity should be our
first
priority and
environmental
destruction is an inevitable sacrifice to achieve such aim as was in the past.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Topic: Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
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