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Many people believe that international tourism has negative implications on their countries What is the reason for it What can be done to change the negative attitude towards international tourism v.2

Many people believe that international tourism has negative implications on their countries What is the reason for it What can be done to change the negative attitude towards international tourism v. 2
Some citizens believe that too much oversea tourists may cause some problems. The purpose for these assay is to discuss the possible reasons for this issue and I will give some proportional steps that the government could take. There are some reasons for why local people think visitors form other countries could take some disadvantages, such as damaging the tourist site or overcrowded the transportation. Some residents argue that tourist would destroy significant tourist site, such as historical building. As a result, the government should spend too much taxes that local people pay for to fix these buildings or protect these places. In addition, too much visitors would also have some negative impacts on our public transportation and cause public transport overcrowding. There fore, some residents who communicate via bus or the MRT would claim that visitors may bring some harmful effects. However, the viewpoints from these people could be reversed, while some measures are taken to solve the problems. One measure that the government can try is to increase the entrance fees, especially for these oversea tourists. The government could use this income for replace these places that are damaged by visitors. Another step could be taken is that government should increase the frequency of public transport, especially in rush hour. It could help communicators much easier to and from the workplace and would not be disturb by oversea tourists. In conclusion, it is true that international visitors could cause some drawbacks and some resident would reluctant to this situation. Therefore, some measures should be taken by the government is important to reduced the harmful effects and change these resident’s perspective.
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citizens believe that too
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much
oversea
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tourists
may cause
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some
problems. The purpose for these assay is to discuss the possible reasons for this issue and I will give
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some
proportional steps that the
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government
could take.

There are
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some
reasons for why local
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people
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think
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visitors
form other countries could take
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some
disadvantages, such as damaging the
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tourist
site or overcrowded the transportation.
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Some
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residents
argue that
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tourist
would
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destroy
significant
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tourist
site, such as historical building.
As a result
, the
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government
should spend too
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much
taxes that local
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people
pay for to
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fix
these buildings or protect these places.
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, too
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much
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visitors
would
also
have
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some
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negative
impacts on our public transportation and cause public transport overcrowding.
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There fore
,
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some
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residents
who communicate via bus or the MRT would claim that
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visitors
may bring
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some
harmful effects.

However
, the viewpoints from these
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people
could
be reversed
, while
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some
measures
are taken
to solve the problems. One measure that the
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government
can try is to increase the entrance fees,
especially
for these oversea
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tourists
. The
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government
could
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use
this income for replace these places that
are damaged
by
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visitors
. Another step could
be taken
is that
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government
should increase the frequency of public transport,
especially
in rush hour. It could
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help
communicators
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much
easier to and from the workplace and would not be
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disturb
by oversea tourists.

In conclusion
, it is true that international
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visitors
could cause
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some
drawbacks and
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some
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resident
would reluctant to this situation.
Therefore
,
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some
measures should
be taken
by the
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government
is
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important
to
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reduced
the harmful effects and
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change
these
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resident’s
perspective.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that international tourism has negative implications on their countries What is the reason for it What can be done to change the negative attitude towards international tourism v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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