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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is toincrease the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagreewith this statement? v.1

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is toincrease the price of fuel. with this statement? v. 1
Excessive traffic and increasing pollution are affecting every major city in the globe. To lessen such problems, some people say that governments should raise the price of fuel such as petrol and diesel. It may help to some extent but I disagree that it is the best solution to solve the problem of environment. To begin with, the number of cars in a country directly depends on the proportion of the population affluent enough to own cars. As a result, raises in gas price could invoke hard feelings among this segment of people but would not drastically change their behaviour in using cars. Even if the number of cars on road is reduced due to higher gas cost, this is not the best way to solve traffic problems. Such policy would hurt the auto industry, place higher costs on current and prospective car owners, and be detrimental to the economy of a nation. In the long run, the final way out could be the construction of better roads and more effective use of available transport facilities. Secondly, there is evidence that waste gas from cars is not the leading cause of air pollution. The culprit may be the discharge of polluting substances into the atmosphere due to the rapidly growing manufacturing industry. As a result, reduction of the number of cars would not return us a blue sky and fresh air. We could better handle this problem if we could increase control over industrial waste discharge and adopt more environmental friendly materials and production equipment. Finally, other measures like the application of cheaper and cleaner energy resources could also be a better solution. For example, we now have the ability to make cell- powered or even solar-powered cars. Such energy is completely clean and plentiful. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, it is not the best way to control traffic and pollution by increasing the gas price because such action will hurt consumers and economy without achieving what it is aimed for. Measures such as construction of better transport facilities and development of new energy resources could be more effective solutions.
Excessive traffic and increasing pollution are affecting every major city in the globe. To

lessen such
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,
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some
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people
say that
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governments
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fuel
such as petrol and diesel. It may
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help
to
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some
extent
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but
I disagree that it is
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the


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best
solution to solve the
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problem
of environment.

To
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begin
with, the number of
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cars
in a country
directly
depends on the proportion of

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the
population affluent
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enough
to
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own
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cars
.
As a result
, raises in
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gas
price
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could


invoke
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hard
feelings among this segment of
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people
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but
would not
drastically
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change


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their
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behaviour
in using
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cars
.
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Even if
the number of
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cars
on road is
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reduced
due
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to


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higher
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gas
cost, this is not the best way to solve traffic
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problems
. Such policy
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would


hurt the auto industry, place higher costs on
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current
and prospective
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car
owners, and

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be
detrimental to the economy of a nation. In the long run, the final way out could
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be


the construction of better roads and more effective
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use
of available transport

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facilities
.

Secondly
, there is evidence that waste
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gas
from
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cars
is not the leading cause of air

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pollution
. The culprit may be the discharge of polluting substances into
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the


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atmosphere
due to the
rapidly
growing manufacturing industry.
As a result
,
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reduction


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of
the number of
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cars
would not return us a blue sky and fresh air. We could
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better


handle this
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problem
if we could increase control over industrial waste discharge and

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adopt
more environmental friendly materials and production equipment.

Finally
, other measures like the application of cheaper and cleaner energy resources

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could
also
be a better solution.
For example
, we
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now
have the ability to
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make
cell-

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powered
or even solar-powered
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cars
. Such energy is completely clean and plentiful.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, it is not the best way to control traffic

and pollution by increasing the
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gas
price
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because
such action will hurt consumers and

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economy
without achieving what it
is aimed
for. Measures such as construction
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of


better transport facilities and development of new energy resources could be more

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effective
solutions.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Mistakes
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IELTS essay The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is toincrease the price of fuel. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
27 paragraphs
356 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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