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The only way to improve the safety on our own road is to havestricter punishment for driving offenders. To what extent do youagree or disagree? v.1

The only way to improve the safety on our own road is to havestricter punishment for driving offenders. v. 1
In recent years, how to improve the safety on our own road has been a hot topic for society. Some people argue that the only way is to have stricter penalties for driving offenders. Although I agree on this idea, I believe that some methods would reduce the number of traffic accidents on road. On the one hand, having stricter punishment and increasing the penalties for irresponsible drivers would improve road safety, For example, it is the fact that using a mobile phone while driving motorbike is repeat this offence. So having strict penalties such as small fines, licence suspension, driver awareness course, and even prison can act as a deterrent On the other hand, having some ways could limit a lot of traffic accidents. first of all, it is vitally important to educate people about rules before they start to drive. For example, in schools teach could teach road symbol signs through games to the student can remember easily. Secondly, the government could provide the best conditions for driver by improving and expanding better road to move safely, finally, local councils could reduce road accidents by investing in better public transport which would to me that fewer people would need to travel by car In conclusion, having stricter punishment for driving offenders is a good way but I suppose that some methods are better to improve the safety on our own road
In recent years, how to
improve
the safety on our
own
road
has been a hot topic for society.
Some
people
argue that the
only
way is to have stricter penalties for driving offenders. Although I
agree
on this
idea
, I believe that
some
methods would
reduce
the number of traffic accidents on road.

On the one hand,
having
stricter punishment and increasing the penalties for irresponsible drivers would
improve
road
safety,
For example
, it is the fact that using a mobile phone while driving motorbike is repeat this
offence
.
So
having
strict penalties such as
small
fines,
licence
suspension, driver awareness course, and even prison can act as a
deterrent


On the other hand
,
having
some
ways could limit
a lot of
traffic accidents.
first of all
, it is
vitally
important
to educate
people
about
rules
before
they
start
to drive.
For example
, in schools teach could teach
road
symbol signs through games to the student can remember
easily
.
Secondly
, the
government
could provide the best conditions for driver by improving and expanding better
road
to
move
safely
,
finally
, local councils could
reduce
road
accidents by investing in better public transport which would to me that fewer
people
would need to travel by car

In conclusion
,
having
stricter punishment for driving offenders is a
good
way
but
I suppose that
some
methods are better to
improve
the safety on our
own
road
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The only way to improve the safety on our own road is to havestricter punishment for driving offenders. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
232 words
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