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Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. v.10

Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. v. 10
In this present world, the existence of formal examinations is an often-debated topic. Lots of individuals believe that the standardized examinations are not capable of evaluating the students’ overall performance effectively. From my point of view, formal examinations are necessary for those examinations can show how hard working a student is. Besides, there is no other way to assess a student’s educational progress in an efficient way. First of all, formal examinations can give us a clue about how hard working a student is. These examinations are generally standardized examinations which means all students take the same exam under equal conditions. Therefore, teachers can easily spot those brilliant students and help them out to improve their educational skills. In fact, there is a chance for all students to prove that they are worth to invest in. For example, they can get a scholarship from one of the best schools in the world. Thus, it is argued that the formal examinations are the best way to assess a student’s educational performance. Secondly, it is widely known that there is no other way to evaluate a student’s performance. For instance, some countries have applied a new education system recently. According to this system, students’ educational progress is assessed with an interview, which took place in certain periods during the year. Nevertheless, some studies have shown that a lot of students attempted to cheat during the exam and some examiners were not able to catch those students. Besides, it is now argued that some students may bribe the examiner in order to pass the interview with a great score. Thus, it is readily apparent that the formal examinations will never be substituted with any other type of assessment. To sum up, many individuals hold the idea that formal examinations are not the best way to evaluate a student’s overall performance. However, after a thorough analysis of the advantages of the formal examinations and the disadvantages of having any other type of examination, it is concluded that the formal examinations are the most efficient method to assess a student’s educational progress.
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formal
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examinations
is an
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often
-debated topic. Lots of individuals believe that the standardized
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examinations
are not capable of evaluating the
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students’
overall
performance
effectively
. From my point of view,
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formal
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examinations
are necessary for those
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examinations
can
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show
how
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hard working
a
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student
is.
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, there is no
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other
way to assess a
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student’s
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educational
progress
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in an efficient way
.

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,
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formal
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examinations
can give us a clue about how
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hard working
a
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student
is. These
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examinations
are
generally
standardized
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examinations
which means all
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students
take the same exam under equal conditions.
Therefore
, teachers can
easily
spot those brilliant
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students
and
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help
them out to
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improve
their
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educational
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skills
. In fact, there is a chance for all
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students
to prove that they are worth to invest in.
For example
, they can
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get
a scholarship from one of the best schools in the world.
Thus
, it
is argued
that the
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formal
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examinations
are the best way to assess a
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student’s
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educational
performance.

Secondly
, it is
widely
known that there is no
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other
way to evaluate a
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student’s
performance.
For instance
,
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some
countries have applied a new education system recently. According to this system,
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students’
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educational
progress
is assessed
with an interview, which took place in certain periods during the year.
Nevertheless
,
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some
studies have shown that
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a lot of
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students
attempted to cheat during the exam and
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some
examiners were not able to catch those
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students
.
Besides
, it is
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now
argued that
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students
may bribe the examiner in order to pass the interview with a great score.
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, it is
readily
apparent that the
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formal
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examinations
will never
be substituted
with any
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other
type of assessment.

To sum up,
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many
individuals hold the
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idea
that
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formal
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examinations
are not the best way to evaluate a
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student’s
overall
performance.
However
, after a thorough analysis of the advantages of the
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formal
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examinations
and the disadvantages of having any
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other
type of
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examination
, it
is concluded
that the
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formal
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examinations
are the most efficient method to assess a
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student’s
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educational
progress.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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