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Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of accessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinions. v.1

Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of accessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinions. v. 1
A big number of people in our country still believes in black magic. It is believed by some individuals that, we should focus on discovering options to live with global climate change rather than trying to prevent it. In my opinion, if we do not stop the weather changes now, the outcome will be perilous in coming days. This is why, I disagree to the aforementioned statement. Firstly, Although climate diversity seems quite natural, but this is not the actual case. Myriad reasons are behind this predicament. Particularly, several types of pollutions are responsible for making the situation worse. Such as, reckless deforestation, excessive industrialisation and massive consumption of fossil fuels and unplanned dumping of waste in all places have contributed to the rapid growth in global warming effect. Secondly, as the days go by, it will be tough for humans to adjust to the new atmosphere, which will be full of natural calamities and contaminations. As a result, extinction of an abundance of animals will be a common scenario in the near future, which is already started happening. Human lives will also be endangered, because plenty of disease will be spread out and due to lack of immunity, they will not be able to fight against it. Therefore, in order to leave a safe and sound environment for the future generations, we must prevent the climate change from getting worse. To illustrate, the icebergs of Antarctica are melting rapidly, which is causing the sea water level to rise simultaneously, lowland areas are already going under water. In conclusion, preventing the upcoming disaster is very essential, in order to have a better future, otherwise the survival of the living will be endangered. Global warming is the result of thoughtless actions of humankind, which will eventually end the lives on earth.
A
big
number of
people
in our country
still
believes in black magic. It
is believed
by
some
individuals that, we should focus on discovering options to
live
with global climate
change
rather
than trying to
prevent
it. In my opinion, if we do not
stop
the weather
changes
now
, the outcome will be perilous in coming days. This is why, I disagree to the aforementioned statement.

Firstly
, Although climate diversity seems quite natural,
but
this is not the actual case. Myriad reasons are behind this predicament.
Particularly
, several types of pollutions are responsible for making the situation worse. Such as, reckless deforestation, excessive
industrialisation
and massive consumption of fossil fuels and unplanned dumping of waste in all places have contributed to the rapid growth in global warming effect.

Secondly
, as the days go by, it will be tough for humans to adjust to the new atmosphere, which will be full of natural calamities and
contaminations
.
As a result
, extinction of an abundance of animals will be a common scenario in the near future, which is already
started
happening. Human
lives
will
also
be endangered
,
because
plenty
of disease will
be spread
out and due to lack of immunity, they will not be able to fight against it.
Therefore
, in order to
leave
a safe and sound environment for the future generations, we
must
prevent
the climate
change
from getting worse. To illustrate, the icebergs of Antarctica are melting
rapidly
, which is causing the sea water level to rise
simultaneously
, lowland areas are already going under water.

In conclusion
, preventing the upcoming disaster is
very
essential, in order to have a better future,
otherwise
the survival of the living will
be endangered
. Global warming is the result of thoughtless actions of humankind, which will
eventually
end
the
lives
on earth.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of accessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinions. v. 1

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  American English
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300 words
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