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Many people believe that exploiting animals by humans unethical. However, another group of people think that to satisfy needs such as food & research is acceptableDiscuss both views and give your opinion v.3

Many people believe that exploiting animals by humans unethical. However, another group of people think that to satisfy needs such as food & research is acceptable 3
Since the inception of life on earth, human beings have been utilizing animals to meet their requirements and this has been a controversial topic. Whilst some opine that it is immoral to do so, I would completely agree with those who deem that this approach is acceptable. This essay will discuss both sides, and explain my belief that it is totally justifiable to use animals. On one side, it is injustice to animals as their life is treated to be of less importance over humans’ life. Killing animals to enjoy a meal is a sinful act in many religions such as Hindu, and Buddhisim so should be avoided. Additionally, they can feel pain when medical experiments are conducted on them unsuccessfully and eventually could die to life-threatening diseases. Risking non-human life to benefit from it is thus not acceptable. Nevertheless, it is vital to consider the amount of progress in human disease prevention and food resources being done due to usage of animals. People could die early from illness, if animals were not used in scientific experiments to find the effective cures. Moreover, some animal products, for instance, milk does not harm animals in fact society takes care of the animals which is beneficial to them as well in return. Undeniably, to maintain food-chain it is imperative to use animals otherwise human beings would die of starvation. In conclusion, I completely concur as evident from above analysis that animals are quintessential to satiate numerous societal need. Even though others think due to religious beliefs and risks involved animals should not be eaten or used by researchers, it is crucial to do so as there is no alternative effective way to conduct research. Thus, since numerous lives have been saved due to contribution of animals in medical science and food it is agreeable to use them.
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life
on earth,
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human
beings have been utilizing
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animals
to
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meet
their requirements and this has been a controversial topic. Whilst
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some
opine that it is immoral to do
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so
, I would completely
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agree
with those who deem that this approach is acceptable. This essay will discuss both sides, and
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explain
my belief that it is
totally
justifiable to
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use
animals.

On one side, it is injustice to
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animals
as their
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life
is treated
to be of less importance over
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humans’
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life
. Killing
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animals
to enjoy a meal is a sinful act in
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many
religions such as Hindu, and
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Buddhisim
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so
should
be avoided
.

Additionally
, they can feel pain when medical experiments
are conducted
on them
unsuccessfully
and
eventually
could
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die
to life-threatening diseases. Risking non-human
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life
to benefit from it is
thus
not acceptable.

Nevertheless
, it is vital to consider the amount of progress in
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human
disease prevention and food resources
being done
due to usage of
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animals
.
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People
could
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die
early from illness, if
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animals
were not
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used
in scientific experiments to find the effective cures.
Moreover
,
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some
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animal
products,
for instance
, milk does not harm
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animals
in fact society takes care of the
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animals
which is beneficial to them
as well
in return.
Undeniably
, to maintain food-chain it is imperative to
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use
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animals
otherwise
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human
beings would
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die
of starvation.

In conclusion
, I completely concur as evident from above analysis that
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animals
are quintessential to satiate numerous societal need.
Even though
others
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think
due to religious beliefs and
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risks
involved
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animals
should not
be eaten
or
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used
by researchers, it is crucial to do
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so
as there is no alternative effective way to conduct research.
Thus
, since numerous
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lives
have
been saved
due to contribution of
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animals
in medical science and food it is agreeable to
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use
them.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that exploiting animals by humans unethical. However, another group of people think that to satisfy needs such as food & research is acceptable 3

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5 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
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