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Many people believe that exploiting animals by humans unethical. However, another group of people think that to satisfy needs such as food & research is acceptable Discuss both views and give your opinion v.2

Many people believe that exploiting animals by humans unethical. However, another group of people think that to satisfy needs such as food & research is acceptable 2
Since the inception of life on earth, human beings have been utilizing animals to meet their requirements and this has been a controversial topic. Whilst some opine that it is immoral to do so, I would completely agree with those who deem that this approach is acceptable. This essay will discuss both sides, and explain my belief that it is completely justifiable to use animals. On one side, it is injustice to animals as their life is considered to be of less importance over human. In contrast, in many religions such as Hindu, and Buddhism animals are considered to be God because they are not things instead beings who can feel, touch and see. To exemplify, they can feel pain when medical experiments are conducted on them unsuccessfully and eventually could die of life-threatening diseases. Risking non-human life to benefit from it should not be permissible. Nevertheless, it is vital to deploy animals for human requirements of lab experiments and food resources. People could die early from illness, if animals were not used in scientific experiments to find the effective cures as there are no alternatives. Moreover, some animal products, for instance, milk does not harm animals, but are crucial for survival of human civilization. Consequently, it is imperative to depend on animals for health and diet reasons otherwise individuals would suffer and starve so it is worth the price paid. In conclusion, even though some think animals should not be eaten or used by researchers and considered equal to mankind, I completely concur with those who believe that animals are quintessential to satiate numerous societal needs. However, it should be permissible as long as animals are not tortured for entertainment and in unavoidable circumstances.
Since the inception of life on earth,
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human
beings have been utilizing
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animals
to
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meet
their requirements and this has been a controversial topic. Whilst
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some
opine that it is immoral to do
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so
, I would completely
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agree
with those who deem that this approach is acceptable. This essay will discuss both sides, and
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explain
my belief that it is completely justifiable to
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use
animals.

On one side, it is injustice to
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animals
as their life
is considered
to be of less importance over
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human
.
In contrast
, in
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many
religions such as Hindu, and Buddhism
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animals
are considered
to be God
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because
they are not things
instead
beings who can feel, touch and
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see
. To exemplify, they can feel pain when medical experiments
are conducted
on them
unsuccessfully
and
eventually
could
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die
of life-threatening diseases. Risking non-human life to benefit from it should not be permissible.

Nevertheless
, it is vital to deploy
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animals
for
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human
requirements of lab experiments and food resources.
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People
could
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die
early from illness, if
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animals
were not
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used
in scientific experiments to find the effective cures as there are no alternatives.
Moreover
,
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some
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animal
products,
for instance
, milk does not harm
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animals
,
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but
are crucial for survival of
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human
civilization.
Consequently
, it is imperative to depend on
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animals
for health and diet reasons
otherwise
individuals would suffer and starve
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so
it is worth the price paid.

In conclusion
,
even though
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some
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think
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animals
should not
be eaten
or
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used
by researchers and considered equal to mankind, I completely concur with those who believe that
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animals
are quintessential to satiate numerous societal needs.
However
, it should be permissible as long as
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animals
are not tortured for entertainment and in unavoidable circumstances.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people believe that exploiting animals by humans unethical. However, another group of people think that to satisfy needs such as food & research is acceptable 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
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