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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 1
Usually, animals are not treated as humans, most people having the feeling that they own them and can do whatever they want with them, but other people started to say that this type of behaviour is wrong. This essay outlines the differences between animals and humans and explains why there should be an equilibrium between the two. On one hand, more and more people think that animals should not be exploited and that they should be treated as humans, having the same rights. Moreover, this implies that animals should have the right to own a property, vote, or even decide over their own choices in life. Nonetheless, I tend to disagree with this argument, because animals do not own a concience like ours, thereby they don't have the ability to think as a humans does, thus they can not choose who their lider should be or how many acres of land they might need. On the other hand, others think that animals should be like slaves, and there should be no interdictions on what we can do with them in order to satisfy our needs. Furthermore, this means that we can use these other life forms just for our well being. For example, using them for their meat and other foods they can produce, research, like drug research, or just other scientific projects that use animals as test subjects. Me personally, I can not say that I entirely agree with this type of thinking, because it's not, in my opinion, the right way treat animals. We should, however, treat them like cohabitants of this earth we share and have a respectfull relationship, trying to live toghether in symbiosis with both parts benefiting upon each other. In conclusion, some people say that animals are at our disposal while others say that this kind of thinking is wrong and we should give them the same rights as human have. Although, in some extent both parts are wright, i think that we should have a respectful relationship and try to live them in a way that benefits both, humans and animals alike.
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,
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animals
are not treated as
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humans
, most
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people
having the feeling that they
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own
them and can do whatever they want with them,
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but
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other
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people
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started
to say that this type of
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behaviour
is
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wrong
. This essay outlines the differences between
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animals
and
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humans
and
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explains
why there should be an equilibrium between the two.

On one hand, more and more
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people
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think
that
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animals
should not
be exploited
and that they should
be treated
as
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humans
, having the same
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rights
.
Moreover
,
this implies that
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animals
should have the
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right
to
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own
a property, vote, or even decide over their
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own
choices in life. Nonetheless, I tend to disagree with this argument,
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because
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animals
do not
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own
a
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concience
like ours, thereby they don't have the ability to
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think
as a
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humans
does,
thus
they can not choose who their
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lider
should be or how
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many
acres of land they might need.

On the
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other
hand, others
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think
that
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animals
should be like slaves, and there should be no
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interdictions on
what we can do with them in order to satisfy our needs.
Furthermore
, this means that we can
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use
these
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other
life forms
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just
for our
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well being
.
For example
, using them for their meat and
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other
foods they can produce, research, like drug research, or
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just
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other
scientific projects that
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use
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animals
as
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test
subjects. Me
personally
, I can not say that I
entirely
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agree
with this type of thinking,
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because
it's not, in my opinion, the
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right
way treat
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animals
. We should,
however
, treat them like cohabitants of this earth we share and have a
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respectfull
relationship, trying to
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live
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toghether
in symbiosis with both parts benefiting upon each other.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
say that
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animals
are at our disposal while others say that this kind of thinking is
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wrong and
we should give them the same
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rights
as
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human
have. Although, in
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some
extent both parts are wright,
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i
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think
that we should have a respectful relationship and try to
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live
them in a way that benefits both,
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humans
and
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animals
alike.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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