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Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and Import food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and Import food as little as possible. v. 2
The idea of living abroad is always thrilling until the challenge of communicating in a new language arises. This essay completely agrees that there are grave social and practical problems associated with residing in a nation that speaks a different language. This will be demonstrated by analysing the accompanying loneliness and difficulty in establishing a thriving business. Firstly, dwelling in a place where it is expected of a person to speak a native dialect distinct from his/hers will lead to a feeling of loneliness. This is because daily interactions will become difficult or even impossible, and such individual will be faced with a non-existent social life. For example, in a 2016 study carried out by the International Society of Sociologists in Russia, 70% of the foreigners living there cited lonesomeness as their greatest challenge. Considering the proportion of people who complained in the aforementioned study, it is clear that loneliness is a significant outcome of communication disparities. Secondly, language plays an important role in helping people become successful in society. When individuals try to set up a business in a place where they cannot speak words that the locals understand, they will experience great difficulty in establishing the business and excelling. For instance, the widely-acclaimed richest man in Africa named Aliko Dangote, in an interview published by the Forbes Africa Magazine in 2018, mentioned language barrier as the most significant hurdle in his path to wealth creation. Therefore, it is clear that failure to interact in a native dialect can hinder the growth and success of enterprises in a foreign country. In conclusion, inability to interact with natives of a different nation due to language differences, can bring about feeling of social abandonment and affect the growth of establishments. Hence, it is agreed that there are social and practical problems associated with residing in country where that language is different. However, it is believed if resources are invested in learning the new language, these difficulties can be circumvented.
The
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idea
of living abroad is always thrilling until the challenge of communicating in a new
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language
arises. This essay completely
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agrees
that there are grave
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social
and practical problems associated with residing in a nation that speaks a
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different
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language
. This will
be demonstrated
by
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analysing
the accompanying loneliness and difficulty in establishing a thriving business.

Firstly
, dwelling in a place where it is
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expected
of a person to speak a native dialect distinct from his/hers will lead to a feeling of loneliness. This is
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because
daily interactions will become difficult or even impossible, and such individual will
be faced
with a non-existent
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social
life.
For example
, in a 2016 study carried out by the International Society of Sociologists in Russia, 70% of the foreigners living there cited lonesomeness as their greatest challenge. Considering the proportion of
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people
who complained in the aforementioned study, it is
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clear
that loneliness is a significant outcome of communication disparities.

Secondly
,
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language
plays an
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important
role in helping
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people
become successful in society. When individuals try to set up a business in a place where they cannot speak words that the locals understand, they will experience great difficulty in establishing the business and excelling.
For instance
, the
widely
-acclaimed
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richest
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man
in Africa named
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Aliko
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Dangote
, in an interview published by the Forbes Africa Magazine in 2018, mentioned
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language
barrier as the most significant hurdle in his path to wealth creation.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
that failure to interact in a native dialect can hinder the growth and success of enterprises in a foreign country.

In conclusion
, inability to interact with natives of a
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different
nation due to
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language
differences, can bring about feeling of
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social
abandonment and affect the growth of establishments.
Hence
, it is
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agreed
that there are
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social
and practical problems associated with residing in country where that
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language
is
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different
.
However
, it
is believed
if resources
are invested
in learning the new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
, these difficulties can
be circumvented
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and Import food as little as possible. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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